Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the bar chart illustrate the layout, weekday for students in three different countries.

overall it can be seen that, the country likewise, UK Japan and Germany and the category For Example, sleeping studying and relaxing on weekdays.

to begin with, approximately the individuals are sleeping in the country like UK average 8.5%. However, also the 8% of and adoleacents are studying also the students in country like Germany they are less relaxing 7% due to hard working. although the highest raising country Japan ought to, studying hard and investigation a new technology.

on the other hand, in Japan, many youngster are taking less relaxing due to, they have been working hard to earn money so as to there are around 4%. in addition, to Germany, all the people approximate 9 to 7% of ratio that all category sleeping, studying, and also relaxing, to they not become a stressful and fully enjoying there lifestyle.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to accurately report the data presented in the bar chart. The figures provided (e.g., '8.5%', '7%', '4%') do not appear to correspond to the visual information typically found in such tasks, and the description of the categories is confusing. The overview is vague and fails to highlight the main trends or significant differences between the three countries. The response lacks a clear summary of the data, and the information provided is often inaccurate or irrelevant to the prompt. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, and the key features are not clearly identified or compared.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inappropriate, such as 'to begin with' and 'on the other hand', which do not effectively link the ideas. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between countries. The sentences are often disjointed, and the overall structure lacks the necessary flow required for a clear report. The lack of clear topic sentences and logical sequencing significantly hinders the coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The range of vocabulary is very limited and often used incorrectly. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'the highest raising country' and 'investigation a new technology', which do not fit the context of describing a bar chart. The repetition of basic words and the misuse of terminology (e.g., 'ratio' used incorrectly) indicate a limited vocabulary. The errors in word formation and usage are frequent and sometimes make the meaning unclear, which is characteristic of a lower band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the bar chart illustrate'), incorrect sentence structure, and misuse of prepositions. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the simple sentences attempted are often riddled with errors. Punctuation is also problematic, with commas used incorrectly throughout the text. These persistent errors frequently impede communication and make the text difficult to read. The control of basic grammar is insufficient to convey the intended meaning clearly.

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