Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Task-1

The given bar illustrates the activites perform by students in three different countries UK, Japan, Germany.

According to the given graph, in the highest number of student studing were 13 hours on the other othere other hand in country like UK and Germery studying time was only 8 and 9 hours respectively. In contrast relaxing time in all three country UK and Germany were equal. Surprizling relaxing time of the the student was only 4 hours.

Aanazling, the graph further, spl sleeping time all the country UK, Japan and germany were nearly equal, UK 8.5 hours sleeping time, Japan 7 hours and Germany 8 hours.

Overall, it is evident that in Japan students spend there highest number of hours on studying teast on and least on relaxing. While other two country all things were equal.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have attempted to identify main features, the analysis is superficial and contains factual inaccuracies regarding the data (e.g., claiming relaxing time was equal across all countries when the chart shows otherwise). The summary lacks a clear overview of the most significant trends, and the information is not fully developed. To improve, ensure you carefully read the data points and provide a more comprehensive comparison of the categories provided in the chart. The under-length nature of the response prevents a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by repetitive phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. Transitions between sentences are often abrupt or missing, making the progression of ideas feel mechanical. For example, the use of 'Aanazling' (likely intended as 'Analyzing') at the start of a paragraph is awkward. To improve, use a wider range of linking words such as 'furthermore', 'conversely', or 'in comparison' to connect your points more fluidly. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus to improve the overall structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with several spelling errors such as 'activites', 'studing', 'Germery', and 'Surprizling'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision. You rely on basic terms like 'highest number' and 'equal' throughout the text. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more varied and precise academic vocabulary, such as 'proportion', 'allocated', 'significant', or 'marginal difference'. Improving your spelling and using more sophisticated collocations will help demonstrate a better command of the language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('the highest number of student studing were'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence structures. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. There are also persistent errors in punctuation and word formation. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralisation and verb tense consistency. Attempting to use more complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, would also help improve your range.

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