Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the chart show the information of three different countries what there student do in weekday the countries is japan uk and germany we can see that japan is very good in stidying because chart show 13 percent of japan is studying in weekdayand there sleeping percentage is 7 which is very gppd for youth and also there relaxing percentage is 4 so japan is very good but there is also some mistake which is there relaxing percentage is very low and also we can uk so the percentage of uk in studyig is 8.5 which is normal and there studying percentage is 8 wgich is good and there relaxing percentage is 7and also we can see germany so there stident also should studying in weekday tbecause the chart show 9 percent of student should study in weekday 8 percent of sleeping and 7 percent of relaxing so my opinion japan is good

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear summary or report main features effectively. The data presentation is inaccurate and confusing; for instance, stating '13 percent of japan is studying' is unclear, and the analysis is subjective rather than objective (e.g., 'japan is very good'). There is no clear overview or comparison of the data, and the response reads more like a personal opinion than a formal report. To improve, you must focus on describing the data objectively, identifying trends, and grouping information logically rather than listing figures for each country in a repetitive manner.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks paragraphing and logical progression. It is written as a single, run-on block of text with very few cohesive devices. The use of 'and also' is repetitive and does not effectively link ideas. The lack of punctuation, such as full stops or commas, makes the text difficult to follow and obscures the relationship between the data points. To improve, you should organize your report into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and two body paragraphs for detailed comparisons. Use a wider range of linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'similarly' to connect your sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'good', 'show', and 'percentage'. There are frequent spelling errors such as 'stidying', 'wgich', and 'stident'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe data trends or comparisons accurately. You should aim to use more precise academic vocabulary to describe statistics and trends. Instead of repeating 'percentage', try using terms like 'proportion', 'figure', or 'rate'. Additionally, focus on using verbs that accurately describe data, such as 'account for', 'represent', or 'constitute', rather than simply saying 'show'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There is a lack of basic sentence structure, with almost no punctuation used throughout the entire text. Subject-verb agreement is often incorrect, such as 'the chart show' instead of 'the chart shows' and 'the countries is' instead of 'the countries are'. The response consists mostly of simple, poorly constructed sentences. To improve, you must focus on basic sentence construction, including the use of capital letters and full stops. Practice using complex sentences by combining ideas with relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, and ensure you check for basic subject-verb agreement.

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