Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph illustrates the information about the students in three different countries; UK, JAPAN, and GERMANY like their records of sleeping, studying, and relaxing.

Overall, the similarity to be noted is that the students of all the three countries are interested in study.

According to the record the students in UK most of the students have been sleeping like 8.5 and 8 for studying and 7 for relaxing.

If we take a look to the Japan, so the number of the studying record is the highest at 13 and least is the relaxing students at 4 while the sleeping students are at 7 as shown in the record.

Germany record is like there are 9 studying students while 8 sleeping students and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the task is incomplete; the description for Germany is cut off mid-sentence, and there is no concluding summary or final comparison. While the student identifies some data points, the reporting is inconsistent and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. The failure to complete the task and the insufficient length mean that the requirements are only partially addressed, leading to a low band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The response lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at an 'Overall' statement, the subsequent paragraphs are poorly organized and do not follow a clear progression. Cohesive devices are largely absent or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'record' and 'students'. The abrupt ending of the text further disrupts the flow of information. To improve, the student should use clear paragraphing (e.g., one for the overview and one or two for detailed comparisons) and transition words to link ideas more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic terms like 'record', 'students', and 'sleeping/studying/relaxing'. There is no attempt to use more sophisticated vocabulary or synonyms to describe the data (e.g., 'allocate time to', 'the highest proportion', 'a significant contrast'). The phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'the number of the studying record is the highest'. Expanding the range of vocabulary to include comparative language and more precise nouns/verbs is essential for a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammar is characterized by frequent errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with article usage ('the UK', 'the Japan'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. For example, 'the similarity to be noted is that the students of all the three countries are interested in study' is clunky. The text lacks complex sentence structures, relying on simple, often fragmented, sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent. The student needs to focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading to eliminate these recurring errors.

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