Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In uk the graphs shows only 8.5 are sleeping and 8 are studying, 7 are relaxing this is not much better from Japan and Germany.Uk need to improve their grap and increase there study and relaxing time . The japan graphs show the youths is more focused on their studies that means the students are counsicous about their carrier and productivity but they need to mentain their sleeping time the graph show sleeping time is 7 so they need to do that 8 and relaxing our is maximum 5 to 6 , thats make them healthy and fit and fine but in tha last the Germany which is tha world fourth largest and education free economy they have need to improve their study time if compare form japan it is to low and everything is only they need to improve their study hours because youth is also depend in studies ..

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to provide a clear overview or a systematic summary of the data. Instead of reporting the figures objectively, the text focuses on subjective opinions, such as suggesting that countries 'need to improve' their study or sleep hours. This is a significant misunderstanding of the task, which requires a factual report rather than a personal critique. While some data points are mentioned, the lack of a structured comparison and the inclusion of irrelevant commentary prevent the response from fully addressing the prompt. To improve, focus on identifying the highest and lowest values and describing trends without offering advice or personal judgment.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization. It is written as a single, run-on paragraph with no clear progression of ideas. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences or contrast the data between the three countries. The transition between discussing the UK, Japan, and Germany is abrupt and confusing. To improve, use clear paragraphing—one for an introduction/overview and one or two for the body—and employ linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'similarly' to guide the reader through the comparisons.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'graphs', 'improve', and 'study'. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'counsicous' (conscious), 'carrier' (career), and 'mentain' (maintain). The language used is informal and lacks the precision required for an Academic Task 1 report. To reach a higher band, you should learn to use specific reporting verbs and nouns related to data, such as 'proportion', 'allocate', 'significant', and 'fluctuate', and ensure you are using the correct terminology for the data presented.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('the graphs shows'), incorrect article usage ('In uk'), and run-on sentences that lack proper punctuation. The sentence structures are simplistic and often fragmented, making the text difficult to follow. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct capitalization, punctuation, and the use of articles before country names and nouns. Practicing the difference between simple and complex sentences will also help improve your score.

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