Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
THE GIVEN BAR GRAPH ILLUSTRATE THE INFORMATION REGARDING THE TYPICAL WEEKDAY FOR STUDENTS IN GIVEN THREE COUNTRIES UK JAPAN AND GERMANY.
LOOKING FROM AN OVERALL , IT IS READILY APPERANT THAT THERE ARE THREE TYPICAL WWEKDAY SLEEPING STUDYING AND RELAXING. IN JAPAN STUNDENTS STUDYING WITNESSED HIGHEST. WHERE AS JAPAN RECORDER AT STUDENTS RELAXING LEAST.
GETTING TO THE DETAILS, IT IS CRYSTAL CLEAR THAT IN JAPAN STUDENTS STUDYING IN WEEKDAYS WITNESSED AT 13 WHICH WAS THE MOST HIGHEST RATHER THAN OTHER COUNTRIES. IN ADITTION OTHER COUNTRIES UK AND GERMANY STUDENTS STUDYING IN WEEKDAYS WAS SEEN NEGLEGIBLE DIFFERENCE IT WAS EXAMINED AT 8 TO 9. ADDITIONALY, STUDENTS SLEEPING IN WEEKDAYS IN UK 8.5 AND OTHER REST OF THE COUNTRIES STUDENTS SLEEPING 7 TO 8 RESPECTIVELY.
FURTHERMORE, RELAXING ON WEEKDAY BY STUDENTS IN UK AND GERMANY WAS ALMOST SAME IT WAS EXAMINED AT 7. WHILE, JAPAN STUDENT WAS RELAXING LEAST RATHER THAN OTHER COUNTRY STUDENT WHICH WAS RECORDED AT 4.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by identifying the main features of the bar chart. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks precision in reporting the data. For instance, the statement 'Japan students studying witnessed highest' is vague, and the comparison between countries could be more effectively developed. While the key features are mentioned, the lack of clear data points for some categories and the reliance on general descriptions rather than specific figures limit the depth of the response. To improve, ensure that all comparisons are supported by accurate data from the chart and that the overview clearly highlights the most significant trends rather than just listing categories.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'GETTING TO THE DETAILS' and 'LOOKING FROM AN OVERALL'. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, making the flow feel somewhat forced. While there is an attempt to use linking words, they are not always used appropriately to connect sentences or ideas smoothly. Improving the variety and naturalness of transition signals will help create a more cohesive and professional-sounding report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'APPERANT', 'WWEKDAY', 'STUNDENTS', and 'NEGLEGIBLE'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. The student relies on basic terms and struggles with collocations, such as 'witnessed highest' or 'recorded at students relaxing least'. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends and comparisons, and ensure that spelling is accurate, as frequent errors can distract the reader and impede the clarity of your report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('Japan students studying witnessed'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary prepositions, which makes the writing feel disjointed. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents the text from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring correct verb forms, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles or incorrect pluralisation. Increasing the variety of complex structures would also help demonstrate better grammatical control.
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