Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart compares the proportion of typical weekday (Sleeping, Studying, Relaxing) for students in three different countries United kingdom, Japan, Germany.
Overall, studying rates rose steadily in all three countries with Japan containing highest figure throughout. Although, relaxing began with the lowest proportion and sleeping proportion are middle of studying and relaxing.
In United Kingdom, sleeping have highest proportion of 8.5 in blue color whereas relaxing have lowest proportion of 7 in green color and studying have 8 in red color . In Japan, studying have 13 while sleeping and relaxing are 7 and 4 respectively. Finally, In Germany almost of all weekday are equal with minor differences sleeping 8 , studying 9 and relaxing 7.
At the end, this percentages rise and fall within the time, year and also generation. It depends on which students like to do
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement. While you have attempted to report on the three categories (sleeping, studying, relaxing) across the three countries, the analysis is superficial and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. The data provided is often inaccurate or confusingly presented, such as the claim that studying rates rose steadily in all countries, which is not supported by the static nature of the data. Furthermore, the final paragraph introduces irrelevant information about generations and personal preferences, which is not present in the chart. To improve, focus on accurately describing the data points and highlighting the most significant differences between the countries.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes misused, such as the awkward transition 'At the end,' which does not serve as an effective conclusion. The referencing is also unclear; for example, the phrase 'in blue color' is an unnecessary description of the chart's legend rather than a focus on the data itself. The progression of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the three countries. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, focused topic would greatly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic terms like 'proportion' and 'highest/lowest,' and there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'Japan containing highest figure' and 'almost of all weekday are equal.' The language lacks the precision required for an Academic Task 1 report. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'a significant majority,' 'a marginal difference,' or 'the most prominent feature.' Additionally, ensure that your terminology is used accurately in the context of describing statistical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Subject-verb agreement is a recurring issue, such as 'sleeping have highest proportion' and 'studying have 13.' There are also errors in sentence structure and punctuation, including the misuse of commas and the inclusion of unnecessary descriptive details about the chart's colors. The range of sentence structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and expanding your sentence variety by using complex structures, such as subordinate clauses, to compare the data more effectively.
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