Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The illustration gives the information about the typical weekdays for the students in three different countries. Overall, In Japan, students spend most of their time in weekdays in studying. The relaxing hours of students in UK and Germany is same about 7 hours of the day.

It is quit evident from the the bar chart that in UK the most of the students spend their 8.5 hours in sleeping and 8 hours in sleeping and just 7 hours in relaxing. Students in UK spend almost same hours in Sleeping and studying.

Furthermore, In Germany, students their most of the time in studying about 9 hours and 8 hours in sleeping and 7 hours in relaxing. In Japan, the students are hardworking because they spend their much time in studying about 13 hours a day and they just sleep just for 7 hours and spend 4 hours in just relaxing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified the main features and made some comparisons, the analysis is somewhat superficial. You have correctly highlighted the contrast between Japan and the other two countries, but the description of the data is repetitive and lacks a clear, analytical structure. To improve, ensure you provide a more comprehensive overview and avoid simply listing the data points for each country. The under-length penalty is applied here as the response is 149 words.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into three short paragraphs, which is a logical approach. However, the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'In [Country]'. The progression of ideas is clear, but the lack of sophisticated linking words makes the flow feel somewhat disjointed. To improve, try to use a wider range of transition signals (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Conversely', 'Regarding') to connect your sentences and ideas more fluidly throughout the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. You rely heavily on simple verbs like 'spend' and 'is'. There are also minor errors in word choice and phrasing, such as 'The relaxing hours of students in UK and Germany is same'. To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use more varied and precise vocabulary to describe trends and data, such as 'allocate', 'devote', or 'proportion', and ensure you use correct collocations when discussing time and activities.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('in UK', 'in Germany'), subject-verb agreement issues ('hours... is same'), and awkward phrasing ('It is quit evident'). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly the use of articles and prepositions, and try to incorporate more complex structures with greater accuracy to demonstrate a wider range.

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