Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates the sleeping, studying and relaxing days for students in the UK, Japan and Germany.

Overall, it is clear from the chart that Japan spent most of their weekdays in studying and half of their time in sleeping and just a little time to relax on the weekdays.

In the UK just about 8.5 were sleeping on the weekdays. While 8 of the students were studying and 7 of the students were relaxing. While only 4 of the students were relaxing.

By contrast, in Germany and the UK, about 8 student were sleeping and relaxing, while 8.5 of the students were sleeping respectively. And only 7 students were relaxing. Than that of the japan. Only the japan an

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While you attempt to identify some features of the bar chart, the information provided is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, you state that Japan spends 'half of their time in sleeping', which is not clearly supported by the data. Furthermore, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence. Because the response is under-length and lacks a clear, accurate summary of the main features and comparisons, it does not adequately cover the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed and difficult to follow. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as the repetitive use of 'While' and 'And' to start sentences. The progression of information is unclear, and the final sentence is incomplete, which breaks the flow of the text entirely. To improve, focus on using transition signals to link ideas logically and ensure each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'sleeping', 'studying', and 'relaxing' throughout the text. There is little evidence of the range of vocabulary required to describe data, such as verbs for comparison (e.g., 'exceeds', 'surpasses') or nouns for trends. Additionally, there are errors in word choice and phrasing, such as 'sleeping and relaxing' being used in a way that does not clearly relate to the data points. Expanding your range of descriptive and comparative vocabulary is essential for a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Japan spent', '8 student were sleeping'), incorrect use of prepositions, and fragmented sentences. The sentence structures are simple and often lack clarity. The final sentence is incomplete, which is a major error in grammatical control. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subjects and verbs agree, and practicing the correct use of articles and pluralization when discussing numerical data.

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