Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
THE bar chart depicts the normal workdays for learner in three different nations.
overall, it is evident that japannes studying structure is good primarly at highest in this chart while,second place is both are simmliar.
to begin with japan studyin in japan acconted for 13% or uk and germany studying in learninger sector quite same just diffrence in one percent only shows at 8or 9%.following by relaxing fell down in japan contributed to 4% while uk and germany both shows same percenatge at 7%.in addtion,sleeping habit is quite increased in uk demonstares at 8.5% or germany rose gradually at 7% in this sleeping sector japan agin go down at 7%.
in contrast,realxin actitives are agin stay same in germany or uk illustarstres 7% at peak .after that in japan again go down at show at least ratio 4% in this chart
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student attempts to summarise the bar chart by mentioning categories such as studying, relaxing, and sleeping across Japan, the UK, and Germany. However, the response falls short of the 150-word minimum requirement, containing only 141 words, which directly impacts the task achievement score. Furthermore, the selection of data is somewhat erratic and lacks clarity. While an overview is attempted ('overall, it is evident that...'), the specific figures cited are frequently confusing or inaccurate, such as claiming studying in Japan accounted for 13% while also stating UK and Germany were at 8 or 9%. Key comparisons are poorly developed and fail to accurately represent the visual data provided in the chart, leading to an underdeveloped response that fits within Band 4.0 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response shows severe deficiencies in organisation, paragraphing, and cohesion. The text is largely lumped together into two block paragraphs with erratic capitalisation and punctuation (e.g., 'THE bar chart...', 'overall, it is evident...'). Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively, such as 'to begin with', 'in addtion', and 'in contrast', which fail to establish a logical progression of ideas. References between countries and categories become muddled, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. Paragraphing is not used sufficiently or appropriately, dragging the overall coherence down to a Band 4.0 level.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Vocabulary is basic, repetitive, and heavily flawed throughout the text. The student uses non-standard terms such as 'learner' instead of 'students', 'japannes' instead of 'Japanese', and 'learninger sector'. Spelling and word-choice errors are pervasive ('simmliar', 'acconted', 'percenatge', 'realxin', 'illustarstres'), which frequently strain the reader and impede comprehension. There is very little evidence of a flexible or accurate lexical range appropriate for an Academic Task 1 response, restricting the score to a Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed, fragmented, or run-on simple sentences. There are frequent and systematic errors in tense usage, subject-verb agreement, and word forms (e.g., 'studying in japan acconted for 13% or uk and germany studying in learninger sector quite same', 'japan agin go down'). Punctuation is largely neglected or misused, and capitalisation rules are ignored at the start of sentences. Because errors are pervasive and frequently distort the meaning of the sentences, this falls squarely within the Band 4.0 criteria.
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