Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar chart display the typical weekend for the students in three different countries(UK, Japan and Germany).

Now, the japan is higghest in studying 13 numbers while UK is less in studying 8 numbers.

sleeping is highy in uk 8.5 numbers also Germany is 8 numbers.Japan is less in slepping.Relaxing is Japan is lawest numbers for other countries also that UK and Germany are same numbers in relaxing. UK is 8 numbers in studying. japan is all countries to highher in studying 13 numbers. Germany is only 9 number in studying.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to cover the bar chart showing the typical weekday for students in three countries, mentioning sleeping, studying, and relaxing. However, the report contains several inaccurate figures (e.g., claiming Japan is highest in studying with '13 numbers', which is correct, but stating UK has '8 numbers' in studying when the chart shows 8, whereas the text is extremely repetitive and confusing). Crucially, the response is severely under-length at only 91 words, failing to meet the 150-word minimum requirement. This major shortfall prevents full development and results in a low task achievement score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text lacks proper paragraphing and organization, consisting of a few broken, disconnected sentences. There is no clear overall progression or logical structure. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused (e.g., 'Now, the japan is...', 'Also Germany is...'). Repetition of phrases like '13 numbers' and 'in studying' creates a disjointed reading experience. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the relationships between ideas and data points.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is extremely basic, repetitive, and restricted (e.g., repeating 'numbers', 'high', 'less', 'studying'). There are numerous word choice and collocation errors, such as using 'numbers' instead of hours or a general unit, and words like 'lawest' (lowest) and 'higghest' (highest). The lexical range is inadequate for an Academic Task 1 response, severely limiting precision and flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying almost entirely on simple, faulty sentences. There are frequent, noticeable errors in punctuation, capitalization (e.g., 'japan', 'uk'), subject-verb agreement, and prepositions (e.g., 'Relaxing is Japan is lawest numbers'). These pervasive errors often impede smooth communication and demonstrate poor control over basic sentence construction.

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