Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar graph shows the information about the students weekend in the three different countries mainly UK, Japan, and Germany.

Overall, around 13% of the students of Japan enjoying their weekend by spent time in studying only, in UK students spent their time in sleeping. In Germany students spent time in studying only around 9%.

At first, in UK most of the students are spending time in sleeping only alomost 8.5%, and 8% of the students spent time in studying which almost lower than other two countries. Around 7% of the students are relaxing on the weekends. However, in Japan only 7% of the students are spending time in sleeping, and almost 13% of the students are spending time in studying on weekends which is higher than other two countries. And only 4% of the students are relaxing on weekends.

AT last, Germany around 8 % of the students are sleeping on weekends, and 9% of students are doing their study on weekends, moreover, around 7% of the students are relaxed on weekends which is same as UK.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The student attempts to address the prompt by summarising the main features of the bar chart regarding the typical weekday for students in the UK, Japan, and Germany. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting and units used. For instance, the prompt data represents hours (e.g., UK sleeping is 8.5 hours), but the student incorrectly describes these figures as percentages, writing 'around 13% of the students of Japan enjoying their weekend'. Furthermore, the chart depicts a 'typical weekday', yet the student repeatedly refers to it as 'weekend'. While some comparisons are made, the misinterpretation of units and the confusion between weekdays and weekends prevent the response from scoring higher.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into an introduction, overall summary, and separate body paragraphs for individual countries ('At first, in UK...', 'However, in Japan...', 'AT last, Germany...'). Paragraphing is attempted, but the transition markers used are awkward and unnatural, such as 'At first' and 'AT last'. Cohesion is often faulty or mechanical, and referencing lacks clarity in places. While a logical sequence is discernible, the overall progression is disrupted by repetitive phrasing and poor linkage between sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary range is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic phrases like 'spent time in studying', 'sleeping', and 'relaxing'. There are notable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'doing their study' instead of 'studying' and 'relaxed on weekends' instead of 'relaxing'. The misuse of 'percentage' (%) instead of hours further weakens the lexical performance. Communication is sometimes hindered by these inaccuracies and awkward phrasings.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, relying primarily on simple and clumsy compound-complex attempts. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('in UK', 'in Japan'), incorrect verb forms ('enjoying their weekend by spent time'), and punctuation inconsistencies (capitalisation in 'AT last'). These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and demonstrate weak control over basic grammatical structures.

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