Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The illustration shows the typical weekday for student in three diffrenet countries.so, we have to explain this in detail.

There are three countries they are Uk, Japan, Germany, the student of thes countries are doing on there weekday that the bar graph shows.Mainly the student have three choice they have Sleepimg, Studying, Relaxing. In United kingdom the student are sleeping in their weekday the percantage of sleeping is 8.5% and on second number the student are studying parcentage of it is 8% and the last one is Relaxing is 7%. Mainly in japan the student are studying more the percantage of it is 13% that's why in technology japan is on number one.I Germany there people are very calm ane relax people but there are mainly focused on studythe percantage is 9%, the percantage of sleeping is also higher in Germany.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the task by reporting information from the bar chart regarding student weekdays in the UK, Japan, and Germany. Some main features are mentioned, such as Japan having the highest study hours (13 hours) and the UK recording 8.5 hours of sleep and 8 hours of studying. However, the student misinterprets the units, repeatedly referring to the hours as percentages (e.g., 'the percantage of sleeping is 8.5%'). Furthermore, the response includes irrelevant personal commentary ('that's why in technology japan is on number one', 'I Germany there people are very calm ane relax people'). Crucially, the text falls short of the 150-word minimum requirement at 141 words, which incurs a penalty. Overall, the task is addressed only partially, reflecting a Band 5 performance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks a clear overall structure and proper paragraphing, presented instead as a single block of text interspersed with conversational prompts ('so, we have to explain this in detail'). Cohesive devices are very basic or missing entirely, and referencing is often unclear, such as 'the student of thes countries are doing on there weekday that the bar graph shows'. There is no clear progression of ideas; instead, sentences jump abruptly between countries and activities without logical transitions. This demonstrates mechanical and inadequate organization, corresponding to a Band 4.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, revolving around simple terms like 'student', 'weekday', 'sleeping', 'studying', and 'relaxing'. There are numerous spelling mistakes throughout the text, including 'diffrenet', 'Sleepimg', 'percantage', 'parcentage', 'themselves' (implied), and 'ane'. Additionally, words are misused, such as treating numerical hours as percentages. While the language is sufficient to convey a rudimentary meaning, the frequent lexical errors and limited range place this firmly in the Band 4 category.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and run-on structures linked improperly with commas (e.g., 'There are three countries they are Uk, Japan, Germany, the student of thes countries are doing on there weekday that the bar graph shows'). Grammatical and punctuation errors are frequent throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the student ... are doing', 'there people are') and missing capitalization or punctuation marks. These errors frequently cause strain and confusion for the reader, fitting the Band 4 descriptors.

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