Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the supplied bar chart illustrates the average workday for sytudent in uk, japan, germany .

overall, it is clear that ,the highest stdies time showed in japan . whereas, in the uk showed plope are sleep in weekdays, while,ralaxing was lowest point in the japan.

In the UK had highest sleeping time to about 8.5 hour . and then studies around 8 hour, which was the lowest level across the three natons. furthermore , students used to relax for an average of 7 houre everyday , similarly to the relaxation timeof german students.

Japanese and german students both spent a large amoaunt of time on studies 713 and 9 hours respectively .German student prefer to sleep for 8 hours ,which is approximately one hour loner than tat the Japanese students.additionally , japanese student have only 4 hours lisure time ,while, german student had 7 hours relax time

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the prompt by summarising the main features of the bar chart, noting sleeping, studying, and relaxing hours across the UK, Japan, and Germany. However, there are several data inaccuracies and typos in the figures reported, such as writing "713" instead of 13 for Japanese study hours. Furthermore, the response falls short of the 150-word minimum requirement, containing only 147 words. While an overview is attempted at the beginning, the lack of complete data accuracy and the failure to meet the minimum word count limit the task achievement score to Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay attempts to structure information logically with an introductory sentence followed by body details, but the paragraphing is poor and unconventional, resulting in a disjointed structure. Cohesive devices are minimal and often misused or awkwardly linked (e.g., "whereas, in the uk showed plope are sleep... while,ralaxing"). Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the mechanical flow is frequently interrupted by punctuation and formatting issues. Overall organisation shows some basic attempts at grouping information, but progression is hindered by poor cohesion, warranting a Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The lexical range is limited and basic, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors that occasionally impede understanding (e.g., "sytudent", "plope", "natons", "houre", "amoaunt", "loner", "tat", "lisure"). The student attempts some topic-related vocabulary like "average", "illustration", and "spend", but control over word formation and orthography is very weak. Because of the heavy concentration of spelling errors and restricted vocabulary, the lexical resource fits the Band 4.0 descriptor.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the text, featuring basic sentence structures and frequent errors in agreement, articles, and preposition usage (e.g., "the highest stdies time showed in japan", "in the uk had highest sleeping time to about 8.5 hour"). Complex sentence attempts are rare and heavily flawed. Punctuation is erratic with stray commas and missing capitalisation. Because errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader, the grammar performance aligns with Band 4.0.

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