Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The diagram illustrates students did vaurios activities like studying,relaxing and sleeping in the typical weekday in UK,Japan and Germany.
overall it is clearly visiable that students in Japan who give highest time study compar to other countries.Wheres, students who live in UK more time spend in sleeping than to other countries.
Futher more discribe the bar chart that students in UK largest their time spend in sleepin it is 8.5. Moreover, they give least time to studying compare to othet countries. And students in UK spended lowest time in relaxing than to sleeping and studying. In contrast students who live in japan they more prefere to studying compare to sleeping and relaxing it is 13 . Addtionlly, they give 7 houres in sleeping and they do relaxing small time of day .
A glance at the chart reveals that Germans students thier mostoff time spend in stadying which is 9 houer which less than to japaness students but more than to students in UK . moreover they 8 houres give in sleeping in typical weekday and lest prefer to relaxing it is 7 .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to cover all parts of the task by reporting data for the UK, Japan, and Germany regarding sleeping, studying, and relaxing. However, there are numerous data inaccuracies and misreadings of the chart. For instance, the student states that students in the UK spend the largest amount of their time sleeping at 8.5 hours, but studying in the UK is actually 8 hours, which is close, yet they claim UK students give the 'least time to studying compare to othet countries' when Japan actually studies for 13 hours and Germany for 9 hours (making the UK the lowest, but the explanation is muddled). Furthermore, Germany's relaxing time is misread as 7 (it is actually 7 or around there, but described confusingly). The overview attempts to capture main trends, such as Japan studying the most, but overall the task achievement is hindered by frequent data confusion and poor development.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into basic paragraphs, including an introduction and body paragraphs. However, the logical progression is severely disrupted by confusing transitions like 'Futher more discribe the bar chart' and 'A glance at the chart reveals'. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, and referencing is frequently unclear (e.g., 'it is 13', 'it is 7'). Paragraphing structure is attempted, but internal cohesion fails to create a smooth, logical flow of ideas, leading to a disjointed reading experience that aligns with Band 5.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, featuring frequent misspellings and incorrect word forms such as 'vaurios', 'visiable', 'compar', 'Wheres', 'Futher more', 'discribe', 'sleepin', 'spended', 'prefere', 'Addtionlly', 'houres', 'thier', 'mostoff', 'stadying', 'houer', 'japaness', and 'lest'. While the student attempts some topic-related vocabulary like 'studying', 'relaxing', and 'sleeping', the density of lexical errors and lack of precise academic control restricts the score to a Band 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences contain significant errors in word order, subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and punctuation. Examples include 'students in Japan who give highest time study compar to other countries', 'students who live in UK more time spend in sleeping', and 'Germans students thier mostoff time spend in stadying'. Complex sentence attempts are heavily flawed and ungrammatical. Errors are frequent and persistently impede meaning, fitting the Band 4 descriptor well.
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