Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the this bar chart, we observe that the japanese students tend to study 5 more hours than the english and 4 more hours than the german students but went it comes to the time spent relaxing the german and english students spend normally 7 hours wish is 3 more hours than the japanese students who spend normally 4 hours relaxing. The time spent sleeping by the student is very close only by one hours less for the japanese wish makes them the more hardworking and most focused on their studies.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarise the data from the bar chart by comparing the time spent by students in the UK, Japan, and Germany on sleeping, studying, and relaxing. However, the text falls severely short of the mandatory 150-word minimum, containing only 91 words. This major under-length constraint restricts the ability to fully develop the ideas or provide a comprehensive overview. Furthermore, there is an inappropriate personal conclusion at the end claiming that Japanese students are 'the more hardworking and most focused', which introduces subjective interpretation rather than objective reporting of data. As a direct consequence of failing the length requirement and limited development, this criterion is capped at a lower band.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The text is written as a single, dense block of text without any paragraph breaks, which hinders readability and structural flow. Cohesive devices are weak and repetitive; the writer relies heavily on 'and' and 'when it comes to', leading to long, run-on sentences. For instance, the first sentence attempts to link multiple comparisons together into one massive sentence without proper punctuation or logical segmentation. Referencing is also somewhat imprecise in places, such as 'the student' instead of 'students'. While there is a basic attempt to sequence comparisons between countries, the lack of paragraphing and poor mechanical cohesion restrict the score.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, such as 'spend', 'time', 'students', and 'hours'. There are noticeable lexical and spelling inaccuracies throughout the text, including 'japanese' (uncapitalized), 'english' used instead of UK, 'went' instead of when, 'wish' instead of which, and 'hours' instead of hour. While the response does attempt some comparative structures regarding quantities, the range of vocabulary is quite narrow and insufficient to demonstrate flexibility or precision, leading to frequent errors that distract the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response consists of only two extremely long and convoluted sentences, demonstrating a very limited control over sentence structure and punctuation. There is a lack of proper comma splices and full stops, which causes sentences to run on uncontrollably. Grammatical errors are frequent, including tense and preposition issues such as 'tend to study 5 more hours than the english', 'went it comes', and 'the student is very close only by one hours less'. The majority of sentences are not error-free, and the frequent structural errors impede smooth reading and comprehension.

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