Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the bar graph depicts the information about the typical workdays for the pupils in three distinct countries and three various types of choars .

according to my percoective , jaoan s children do more study rather than uk and germany .

To begin with this , in japan we can the students who study alot rather than other countries . however , relaxing schedule is also less than uk and getmany .secondly , sleeping schedule are almost same in these countries .in japan , children do study alot and donot relax much but take a good sleep .

on the other side , uk and germany children same in relaxing and also in sleeping and studing approixemately same .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word length requirement of 150 words, coming in at only 119 words, which results in a significant penalty under Task Achievement. While the student attempts to summarise the chart by identifying some general trends—such as noting that Japanese students study the most and relax the least—the data is reported very loosely without specific figures. Key comparisons between the UK and Germany are vague and underdeveloped, stating simply that they are 'approixemately same'. Overall, the response addresses the prompt only partially and lacks the thoroughness required for a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The organization of the essay is basic, with very short, fragmented paragraphs and repetitive transitional phrases like 'To begin with this' and 'secondly'. The logical progression is weak, and referencing is often unclear, such as when the writer uses pronouns without proper antecedents. Cohesive devices are minimal and mechanical, and paragraphing is poorly handled, failing to separate the introduction, body features, and overview effectively.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The lexical range is very limited and basic, with frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'percoective', 'jaoan', 'choars', 'getmany', 'approixemately'). The student attempts some topic-related vocabulary such as 'depicts', 'students', and 'relaxing', but word choice is often inappropriate, such as 'workdays' instead of 'weekdays' and 'choars' instead of activities. These errors occasionally strain communication and reflect a restricted vocabulary suitable for a lower band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak, with a very limited range of sentence structures. The response contains numerous errors in basic grammar, punctuation, and capitalization (e.g., lowercase 'the' at the beginning of sentences, 'jaoan s children do more study rather than uk'). Complex structures are rarely attempted, and simple sentences often contain errors, such as missing auxiliary verbs ('sleeping schedule are almost same') and misuse of comparative forms ('more study rather than'). Errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader.

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