Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given bar chart represents the students data from different countries like UK, Japan, Germany. This bar chart represents the students data about sleeping, relaxing and studying hours are different from different countries. In Japan student's are sleeping 7 hours of average sleeping time then Germany's student's taking average 8 hours of sleep then UK is taking 8.5 hours of average sleeping. Japan's students taking 13 hours of average studying time then Germany's students taking 9 hours of average studying and UK's students takes 8 hours of average studying time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, containing only 90 words. This significantly impacts task achievement as the information is only partially reported and lacks a proper overview. While the student attempts to mention the data for sleeping, studying, and relaxing across the UK, Japan, and Germany, the reporting is repetitive and lacks synthesis or meaningful comparison. Key figures such as Japan's 13 hours of studying and the UK's 8.5 hours of sleeping are identified, but the lack of development and severe under-length penalisation restrict the band score to 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The text is written as a single, dense block of text with no paragraphing used to structure the response. Cohesion is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on consecutive 'then... then...' structures to link sentences (e.g., 'then Germany's student's taking average 8 hours... then UK is taking...'). There is a lack of cohesive devices to guide the reader smoothly through comparisons. Although the sequence of information follows a logical pattern by category, the absence of paragraphing and rudimentary cohesion keep this criterion at a band 4.5.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, revolving around words like 'students', 'average', 'sleeping', 'studying', and 'relaxing'. There are unnatural collocations and phrasing throughout the text, such as 'students data' instead of 'data for students' and 'taking average 8 hours of sleep' instead of 'spending an average of 8 hours sleeping'. Word choice is frequently imprecise. However, the vocabulary is adequate to convey basic data points, which aligns with a band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response relies on simple and repetitive sentence structures, primarily subject-verb-object patterns with present continuous or simple present tenses. There are several grammatical errors and awkward punctuation/possessive markers, such as unnecessary apostrophes ('student's' instead of 'students' in plural contexts). Complex sentence structures are absent. The frequency of grammatical inaccuracies and the limited structural range support a band 5.0.

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