Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

for my perspective this pic illustrate the data of how much weekday for student

in different countries recognize that the 3 catogarize sleeping ,studying, realxing

so fist we would talk about america there students are most of the time is take the nap and then were a quite serious for their study and then they wre realexing so in this pic the value of sleeping is8 .5 and then the value for their studying is 8 which are less than sleeping and then their child is releax and then in 2 number we have japan so basically japan students are little bit serious for their study and they were sleeping and some time the were realeaxing their students are quite serious for their grades so in the chart japan value for study and its value is 13 whichare the highest rank so next in chart we have germany in germany the value of study is quite serious and the were greater than uk and then their students is used most of the time issleeping and then realeaxing so in charts the country which are serious of study is japan then germany and then uk

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response addresses the task minimally and relies heavily on informal, conversational language rather than an academic report style. While the student attempts to mention the three categories (sleeping, studying, relaxing) and the three countries (UK, Japan, Germany), the data is frequently inaccurate or confused. For instance, the student states that the UK value for sleeping is 8.5 (which is correct for the UK, but the text becomes confused regarding America) and that Japan's study value is 13, which is correctly identified as the highest rank. However, the data presentation lacks a clear overview and fails to make appropriate, structured comparisons between the countries. Ideas are limited and under-developed, and the response is presented as a single unstructured block of text rather than well-organized paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text lacks proper paragraphing and is written as a single, continuous run-on sentence connected by repetitive use of 'and then' and 'so'. There is no clear overall progression or logical sequencing of information, making the text difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are either missing or inadequately used, relying on conversational fillers like 'for my perspective', 'so first we would talk about', and 'so in the chart'. Referencing is also unclear at times, such as abruptly mentioning 'america' where the chart actually shows the UK. To improve, the student needs to group information logically into distinct paragraphs and use a wider range of appropriate cohesive devices to guide the reader through the data.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Vocabulary usage is basic, repetitive, and heavily influenced by spoken English. The student uses incorrect word forms and informal expressions such as 'pic', 'catogarize', 'realxing', 'take the nap', and 'realeaxing'. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'catogarize', 'fist', 'wre', 'realexing', and 'realeaxing'. While the student attempts to use less common vocabulary related to the prompt, such as 'serious', 'grades', and 'rank', inaccuracies in word choice and spelling are frequent and occasionally strain the reader's understanding. A wider and more precise range of academic vocabulary is needed to describe charts and data effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mainly of long, run-on sentences joined by coordinating conjunctions. There is a complete lack of punctuation, with no periods or commas used to separate clauses or sentences. Frequent errors occur in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'this pic illustrate', 'there students are most of the time is take the nap', 'japan students are little bit serious', and 'the country which are serious of study'. These errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher band, the student must demonstrate better control over simple and complex sentence forms, use correct verb tenses, and apply accurate punctuation.

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