Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This bar chart evaluates the typical weekday for students in three different countries including UK, Japan and Germany. Weekdays are the most important part of our daily life. As a student I concluded that we can make it either progressive or conservative.

According to the bar chart, a student living in UK spend most of his time in sleeping with a rating of 8.5. On the other hand, student living in Japan spend his time in sleeping with a rating of 7 and at last a student living in Germany spend time in sleeping with a rating of 8. Now we jump onto the studying ratio according to countries. A UK student invest his time in studying with a ratio of 8, while Japan is one of the most highly rated country in terms of studying with a ratio of 13 and Germany has a studying ratio of 9. At last Relaxing is one of the major event in a life of student. A UK student kill his time in relaxing with a proportion of 7. In this graph, Japan is one of the least country in terms of relaxing with a rate of 4. A Germany student engage in relaxing with a ratio of 7 which is similar to the UK.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the task only partially and lacks the level of objective reporting expected in Academic Task 1. The writer includes irrelevant personal opinions and filler in the introduction, stating that 'weekdays are the most important part of our daily life' and concluding that 'we can make it either progressive or conservative.' While the main data categories (sleeping, studying, and relaxing) and the three countries are mentioned, the reporting is mechanical and lacks a proper overview of the salient trends in the chart. Furthermore, some data points are framed as subjective value judgements, such as describing how a UK student 'kills his time' or referring to Japan as 'one of the least country in terms of relaxing.' To improve, the response must present a clear overview without personal commentary and accurately report the data features as a formal summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some basic organisation in the response, but it lacks a clear overall progression. The essay is presented as a single dense body paragraph following the introduction, which limits the logical flow. While basic cohesive devices and transition markers are used, such as 'On the other hand,' 'At last,' and 'Now we jump onto,' some are used awkwardly or repetitively (e.g., restarting sentences with 'At last'). Referencing is also occasionally repetitive, with almost every sentence beginning with a subject-by-subject breakdown rather than grouping data comparatively. To reach a higher band, the writer should structure the response into logical paragraphs—such as a dedicated overview followed by comparative body paragraphs—and use a wider, more natural variety of cohesive devices to link ideas smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task, featuring noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and style. The student relies heavily on repetitive structures and simple terms, describing numerical values as a 'rating' or 'ratio' rather than hours or time spent. There are also unnatural lexical choices and inappropriate colloquialisms, such as saying a student 'kill his time in relaxing' or referring to Japan as 'one of the least country.' Word formation and spelling are mostly functional, but these frequent lexical inaccuracies cause some friction for the reader. To improve, the writer should expand their lexical range to include precise academic vocabulary for describing statistical data, avoiding conversational or informal phrasing entirely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple and repetitive active constructions (e.g., 'A student living in UK spend...'). Attempts at complex sentences are minimal and frequently faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors involving subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'a student... spend', 'Japan is one of the most highly rated country'), missing articles (e.g., 'living in UK', 'in Japan'), and incorrect prepositions inside grammatical patterns (e.g., 'spend his time in sleeping' instead of 'on sleeping'). Punctuation is basic, and these recurring errors can cause occasional difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher score, the writer must demonstrate greater control over basic grammatical structures, ensure correct verb agreements and article usage, and incorporate a wider variety of accurate complex sentence forms.

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