Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart depicts the students activities on weekdays in three various countries such as Uk, Japan and Germany.

Overall, Students in Japan are recorded as more studing during workdays and their relaxation period is shorter than all. While Uk and Germany have recorded with almost similiar pattern of routines with a small fluctuations.

The students of Japan are recorded highest percentage of studying during week-days with 13 percent. However there time for sleep is around 4 percent which is the lowest among all others, and followed by relaxing which is around 4 percent only.

The Uk is reported a highest sleeping schedule with approximately 8.5 percent and around 0.5 percent high from their studying time. while, 7 percent they expend for relaxing minds. Furthermore, in Germany studying timetable is the second largest percentage after a Japan with 9 percent and dedicate 8 percent for sleeping and 9 percent for relaxation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response successfully addresses all parts of the prompt by reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons across the three countries. You provide a clear overview outlining the main trends, such as Japan's high studying hours and short relaxation period. Most data points are accurately reported, such as Japan's 13 percent for studying and the UK's 8.5 percent for sleeping. However, your descriptions of some data are slightly under-developed or imprecise; for instance, you describe the categories in terms of percentages rather than hours, which does not accurately reflect a 24-hour day. To reach the next level, ensure that data interpretation strictly aligns with the chart units and extend your comparisons with more precise synthesis across all three categories.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement with a clear introduction, an overview paragraph, and body paragraphs dedicated to specific comparisons. Information flows logically from the general overview to detailed country data. However, cohesion is at times mechanical or faulty due to awkward transitional phrases and referencing issues, such as starting sentences with 'While Uk and Germany have recorded...' without a main clause, and abrupt shifts between countries. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion within paragraphs could be smoother to establish clearer progression. To improve further, use a wider variety of cohesive devices more naturally and ensure that reference words clearly link ideas without disrupting the flow of reading.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the main features of the chart. You attempt some less common vocabulary and comparative structures, such as 'depicts', 'highest percentage', and 'second largest percentage'. However, there are notable lexical errors and awkward word choices throughout the text, including 'studing' instead of studying, 'similiar', 'expend for relaxing' instead of spend on relaxation, and repetitive phrasing such as 'are recorded as' and 'are recorded highest'. These errors occasionally distract the reader, though they do not completely impede communication. To achieve a higher band, focus on precise word formation, correct collocations, and avoiding spelling mistakes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting structures like comparative clauses and introductory phrases. However, there are frequent grammatical errors in sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions. Examples include fragment sentences like 'While Uk and Germany have recorded with almost similiar pattern...', missing articles ('The Uk', 'a highest sleeping schedule'), and incorrect prepositional usage ('dedicate 8 percent for sleeping'). These errors require some effort from the reader to interpret, although meaning remains mostly clear. To progress to a higher band, you need to increase your proportion of error-free sentences and pay closer attention to basic grammatical patterns, article usage, and clause construction.

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