Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrate the typical weekday for students in there countries Uk, Japan and Germany.

Overall, we can see japan country is highest quantity student studying,The Lowest quantity student relaxing, and the sleeping quantity student comapre the other countries is have same.

Germany students highest quantity studying and lowest quantity relaxing and sleeping student middle range.

UK studens highest quantity sleeping and Lowest students relaxing, and other the middle range student studying.

OVERVIEW:

The Japan student is highest students studying like 13%.Overall this country high quantity students studying.The UK students very lowest quantity students studying compre to the other country students.

UK students is highest quantity sleeping like 8.5% students sleeping.compare to the other countries is very highest quantity students is sleeping.

Germany students studying and sleeping and relaxing is same ranges

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the main broad pattern that Japan has the most study time and the least relaxation, and you note that UK students sleep the longest. However, several comparisons are inaccurate or unclear: Germany’s study figure is not the highest (Japan is), and Germany’s three activities are not in the same range, since studying is 9 hours while relaxing is 7. The chart gives hours, not percentages, so “13%” is incorrect. The response also repeats points rather than selecting and clearly reporting the key comparisons, and it does not meet the 150-word minimum. To improve, give a concise overview, report the correct figures in hours, and compare all three countries accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response with an opening, an overall statement and country-related comments. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the same points are repeated in the later “OVERVIEW” section, and the country comparisons are not arranged in a clear sequence. For example, the response first discusses Japan, Germany and the UK, then returns to Japan and the UK without adding a consistent comparison. Connections between ideas are also weak, and punctuation runs several statements together. Use one introduction, one concise overview and a clearly ordered body paragraph comparing the figures; avoid repeating the overview.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with “highest quantity,” “lowest quantity” and “students” used repeatedly to describe the data. Some choices make the meaning difficult to interpret, such as “sleeping quantity student compare the other countries is have same.” There are also spelling errors, including “comapre” and “studens,” and “13%” uses an unsuitable unit for the chart. Use precise chart language and vary expressions for amounts and comparisons. For example, describe students as spending a number of hours on an activity, and use “longest,” “shortest” or “more than” where appropriate. This would make the comparisons clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response relies mainly on short, simple statements, and frequent errors in sentence structure and agreement often make the meaning unclear. Examples include “The bar chart illustrate” and “Germany students highest quantity studying,” where the verb or sentence structure is incomplete or incorrect. The phrase “the sleeping quantity student compare the other countries is have same” also shows problems with word order and verb forms. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, with sentences joined directly after commas or full stops. Practise complete comparative sentences, such as “Japanese students spend 13 hours studying, more than students in the UK or Germany,” and check subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries.

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