Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In UK 8.5% students spend time on sleeping ,8% on studying and 7% on relaxing .In japan 7%students spend their time on sleeping ,13% on studying and 4% on relaxing .In Germany 8%students spend their time on sleeping ,9% on studying and 7% on relaxing .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You report all nine figures accurately: for example, the UK values are 8.5 for sleeping, 8 for studying and 7 for relaxing, and the figures for Japan and Germany also match the chart. However, the response only lists data; it gives no overview of the main patterns or comparisons, such as Japan having the highest study figure and lowest relaxation figure. The task requires at least 150 words, while this response is 46 words, so it is substantially under length and cannot develop the summary adequately. To improve, add a clear overview, compare the countries’ routines, and select key figures to support those comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The information is presented in a consistent country-by-country order, which makes the figures possible to follow. However, the response is a single run-on sequence of three similar statements, with no paragraphing, overview, or linking language to show which comparisons matter. The repeated pattern “In [country] …” gives basic organisation but does not create a clear progression from the main features to supporting details. Separate the response into an introduction, an overview, and a details paragraph, and use links such as “By contrast” or “Meanwhile” to connect comparisons. This would make the information more coherently arranged rather than simply listed.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary is sufficient to identify the three activities and report the figures, using words such as “sleeping,” “studying,” and “relaxing.” However, the range is very limited and repetitive, with “spend time” repeated for each country and no language for describing comparisons or overall patterns. Some phrasing is also unnatural, particularly “spend time on sleeping”; more precise collocations would make the summary clearer and more appropriate to chart description. Try expressions such as “spend 8.5 hours sleeping,” “the figure for studying,” and “the highest proportion.” A wider set of accurate reporting and comparison phrases would help you communicate the chart’s main features more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response uses simple sentence patterns to communicate the figures, and the country-by-country structure is generally understandable. However, there is little variety in sentence forms: each statement follows almost the same pattern, so the response does not demonstrate a broader grammatical range. There are also errors in sentence boundaries and punctuation, as the three statements run together without consistent spacing after full stops. For example, “relaxing .In japan” should be separated and punctuated correctly. Practise combining comparisons in controlled complex sentences, such as “While UK students spend 8.5 hours sleeping, Japanese students spend 7,” and check sentence boundaries and capitalisation.

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