Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The data represents what does a students or how does a student spend their weekdays for the students of their specific countries.

Overall the three main features in a life of a students are sleeping, studying and relaxing.

UK and Germany are slightly similar to each other they have around same sleeping rate. In study matters Germany is a bit better than UK the rate of studying in UK is 8 on the other hand Germany's study is at 9. However the rate of relaxing between both the countries are same i.e. 7.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the three activities and make a relevant comparison between the UK and Germany, including their study and relaxation figures. However, the report covers only two of the three countries: Japan, whose 13 hours of study is the chart’s highest figure and whose relaxation time is lowest at 4 hours, is omitted. There is also no clear overview of the main contrasts across all three countries, and the opening description does not report data. The response is substantially below the required 150 words, leaving the chart only minimally summarised. To improve, give an overview of the key patterns, then compare all countries using accurate figures and select the most significant differences.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic structure: an opening statement, a general comment, and a paragraph comparing the UK with Germany. This gives the reader some sense of organisation, and linking expressions such as “on the other hand” and “however” show an attempt to connect comparisons. However, the ideas do not progress into a complete account of the chart, particularly because Japan is not discussed. Some links are awkward or unclear, and the final comparison is compressed into one long sentence. Organise the report into a clear introduction, an overview, and comparison paragraphs grouped by country or activity. Use linking words only where they accurately show the relationship between the figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “sleeping,” “studying,” “relaxing,” “rate,” and “similar,” so the reader can generally understand the topic. The range is limited, though, and some expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “in study matters” and “the rate of relaxing.” Repetition of “rate” also makes the comparisons less clear; the chart reports hours, rather than rates. Choose precise terms such as “hours spent studying” or “time devoted to relaxation,” and vary comparison language with phrases like “slightly higher” and “the same amount of time.” This would make the report more accurate and natural while retaining its clear basic meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the comparison between Germany and the UK is mostly understandable. However, errors occur frequently in basic sentence construction and agreement. For example, “what does a students” has incorrect question structure and plural agreement, while “the three main features in a life of a students are” contains article and number errors. The sentence beginning “UK and Germany are slightly similar” also joins several comparisons in a way that makes the structure difficult to follow. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and plural forms, and separate comparisons into shorter sentences before attempting longer structures. Clearer punctuation will also help.

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