Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

According to the bar chart, Study rate is more high in Japan than UK and Germany while the rates of relaxing and sleeping is almost equals during these countries. This bar chart is to shown as japenese people more time spend their studies than sleeping and relaxing. However, the rate of relaxing is very low than UK and Germany so it means people do more time study than relaxation. the rate of the sleeping is almost good. If according to see the chart, more time to spend in sleeping of people of UK than Japan and Germany but almost spending the same time in sleeping, studying and relaxing in Uk. After that we talk to about Germany, almost same time spend these things too. Same spending hours between Uk and Germany for relaxing and both countries are same time spending than Japan.

As a Result, Japenese People are work in each day roundabout 13 hours than relaxation and sleep.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main broad pattern: Japan has the highest study figure, while its relaxation figure is lower than those of the UK and Germany. However, the account is only partially accurate and developed. The chart shows that studying is 13 hours in Japan, compared with 8 in the UK and 9 in Germany; relaxing is 4 hours in Japan and 7 in both other countries. Your statement that sleeping, studying and relaxing take “almost the same time” in the UK and Germany is misleading, particularly because study differs from the other activities. The overview also misses the clearest contrast: Japan’s study time is much higher, while its sleep and relaxation times are lower. Select the key comparisons and report them precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some organisation: you begin with a general comparison, then discuss Japan, the UK and Germany, and finish with a concluding statement. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several points are repeated or expressed unclearly. For example, the ideas that UK and Germany spend similar time relaxing and that Japan spends less time relaxing appear more than once, while “After that we talk to about Germany” does not create a clear transition. The final sentence also introduces a conclusion without clearly summarising the chart’s main comparisons. Use a clear overview followed by one paragraph comparing the countries, and connect each figure directly to the activity and country it describes.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is limited but includes relevant task words such as “study,” “relaxing,” “sleeping,” “rate” and “hours,” so the general topic is usually recognisable. However, repeated basic wording and inaccurate collocations make some comparisons hard to interpret. Phrases such as “the rate of the sleeping is almost good,” “more time spend their studies” and “same time spending” are not natural ways to describe hours in a chart. There are also spelling and word-form errors, including “japenese” and “Japenese.” Build a small set of precise chart expressions, such as “spend 13 hours studying,” “the figure for relaxation,” and “compared with,” and check country names carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer comparisons, but the range is limited and errors occur frequently, sometimes making relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “Study rate is more high,” “the rates of relaxing and sleeping is,” and “This bar chart is to shown,” which show problems with comparison forms, subject–verb agreement and verb construction. Sentence boundaries and capitalisation are also inconsistent, as in the lowercase “the rate” after a full stop and “Uk.” Longer sentences such as “If according to see the chart…” are difficult to parse. Practise accurate basic patterns first—for example, “The figure for studying is higher in Japan than in the UK”—then add comparisons using “whereas” or “while.”

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