Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the given bar chat tells us the weekdays indifferent country for students.

well in japan and germany has studing week days more as in the Uk.these countries has less relaxing weekdays moreover in Uk has more sleep weekdays as per as other countries and less as same as other countries less relaxing weekdays.

according to chart japan is in 13number for studing most hightes then other countries and at 7 for sleeping,lowest for relaxing as per as other countries.

meanwhile germany is in 9 number for studiny , in 8th number for sleeping and number 7th for relaxing.

on the other hand uk has 8.5 for sleeping , 8 for studying and 7 for relaxing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s three activities and report several figures accurately, including Japan’s 13 hours of studying and the UK’s 8.5 hours of sleeping. You also recognise that Japan studies the most and relaxes the least. However, the response gives only a limited summary: it does not clearly compare the overall patterns across all three countries, and the opening comparison about Japan and Germany studying more than the UK is inaccurate because Germany’s 9 hours exceeds the UK’s 8, but the comparison is not clearly expressed. The response is 115 words, below the required 150, and this limits how fully you can select and explain the main features. Add a clear overview and develop the key contrasts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic sequence: it begins with a general statement, then mentions Japan, Germany and the UK in turn. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is organised. However, there is no clear paragraphing or distinct overview, and the progression is weakened by unclear links such as “moreover” and “on the other hand,” which do not always introduce a precise contrast. The opening comparison also combines several ideas in a confusing way. Grouping the information into an introduction and overview, followed by a paragraph comparing countries, would make the progression easier to follow. Use linking expressions only when the relationship between the figures is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “studying,” “sleeping,” “relaxing,” and “most,” so the reader can identify the activities being compared. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or spellings make the report harder to understand, such as “bar chat,” “indifferent country,” “studing,” and “hightes.” Phrases such as “13number” and “8th number” are not natural ways to report data. Aim for accurate, concise expressions such as “spend 13 hours studying” and “the highest figure.” Check spelling carefully and use a wider range of comparison language, for example “whereas,” “compared with,” and “the lowest amount of time.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, but control of sentence structure and basic grammar is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “in japan and germany has studing week days more as in the Uk” lacks a clear subject–verb structure, while “these countries has” has an agreement error. The sentence beginning “moreover in Uk has more sleep weekdays” also has an incomplete grammatical pattern. Most statements rely on simple constructions, with little accurate variety. Practise forming clear subject–verb sentences, using articles and prepositions appropriately, and punctuating complete sentences. For example: “Japanese students spend 13 hours studying, compared with 9 hours in Germany and 8 in the UK.”

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