Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the bar chart, we can seeing that the typical weekdays for students in three different countries.

we see that there are 3 country in the bar chart. There are uk,japan and also Germany. we see that students spending time in there weekend on sleeping, studying and relaxing.

we also see that students in uk are mainly spending there time by sleeping, there is 8.5%. And then 8%students spend there time by studying and the last 7% students spend there holidays in relax meant. on others side,japanese students highly Spend there time by doing study which is almost 13%.after then 7% students are sleeper. Moreover the last 4% students using there free time by relaxation. on other hand we see that Germany student, In the students of Germany, there are almost 8% students are use there free time by sleeping and another is 9% students are studying ther weekdays. And the last only 7% students doing relaxed on the weekdays

so, in the bar chart we see the many students like study and many sleep and also many students likes relaxing in there free time or weekdays

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify all three countries and report figures for sleeping, studying and relaxing, so the response is recognisably about the chart. However, the main features are not clearly summarised: there is no concise overview of the strongest contrasts, such as Japan’s much higher study figure and lower relaxation figure. Some details are inaccurate or unclear. For example, the chart gives 8.5 hours of sleep in the UK, not 8.5%, and the response describes this as students’ “time” but repeatedly calls the figures percentages. The closing claim that many students like all three activities is too general and does not capture the comparisons. Select the key patterns, state them accurately, and distinguish hours from percentages.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response makes an attempt to group information by country, and phrases such as “on the other hand” show an effort to compare. However, the organisation is difficult to follow because the opening repeats the task, the country descriptions run together in a long paragraph, and the final sentence adds a vague summary rather than a clear overview. Linking expressions are often used mechanically or inaccurately, as in “after then” and “on others side,” while repeated “we see” does little to guide the reader. Use a clear structure: introduction, overview, then one or two paragraphs comparing the figures. Keep each comparison focused and use a small number of accurate transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on “we see,” “spend there time,” and “students.” Some wording makes the intended meaning hard to interpret, particularly “spend there holidays in relax meant” and “students are sleeper.” The response also uses imprecise terms such as “highly” for a large amount of study and “like” to describe chart data. These choices strain clarity, although the reader can generally identify the activities and countries being discussed. Build a more suitable range for describing charts, including “spend,” “hours,” “the figure for,” “higher/lower,” and “respectively.” Check spelling and word forms, and avoid replacing precise data descriptions with claims about what students like.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to form longer sentences and make comparisons, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently affect clarity. The opening, “we can seeing,” has an incorrect verb form, while “there are 3 country” shows a plural-agreement error. Other examples include “students spending time,” “8%students spend,” and “Germany student,” where verb forms, spacing and noun forms are not controlled. Sentence boundaries and capitalisation are also inconsistent, especially in the long country-by-country paragraph. Most sentences follow simple patterns, and the longer attempts are often faulty. Practise accurate subject–verb patterns and complete sentences first, then combine related comparisons with controlled clauses and consistent punctuation.

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