Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart campares the weekday rountine of students across three diffirent countries ,United Kingdom,Japan and Germany.

Overall, the study rate in Janpan is peak at in all above the three countries.While the relaxing proportion between the students hit the bottom out in same as Japan only 4% during the weekday.

The student who lives in Uk mostly prefer to sleep more therefore the sleeping rissue in UK is 8.5% a week . Morever,the students studying only 8% and relax only 7%, this rissue is more campare the other countries like , Japan and Germany.Quensequently, the studying rate in Japan at top with 13%.Morever, the sleep and relax rate is less than Uk. Finally, In Germany is smilier to stand at 7% in relaxing same as UK, Morever the studying is increse a bit campare the UK but the Japan is still on top in this regard.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main contrast: Japanese students spend the most time studying, while relaxing is lowest in Japan. You also include several relevant figures, such as 13 hours of study in Japan and 8.5 hours of sleep in the UK. However, the response only partially covers the chart: it gives no clear overview of the full pattern across all three activities and countries, and some comparisons are unclear or inaccurate. For example, saying UK students sleep “more” is not supported, as Germany’s figure is close at 8 hours and Japan’s is 7. The figures represent hours, not percentages. The response is also 3 words below the 150-word minimum. Add a concise overview and compare the three countries accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction and an overview before moving to country details. Linking words such as “Overall,” “Finally,” and “Moreover” show an effort to connect ideas. However, progression is difficult to follow because several comparisons are packed into long, loosely connected sentences, and the UK, Japan, and Germany are not presented in a consistent structure. Some links are also unclear, such as “this rissue is more campare the other countries.” Use separate, focused sentences or paragraphs to group the main overview and the country comparisons. Make each comparison explicit so the reader can follow how the figures relate.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “weekday routine,” “studying,” “sleep,” and “relaxing,” and you attempt to describe comparisons with phrases such as “at top.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to understand, including “study rate,” “sleeping rissue,” and “hit the bottom out.” Frequent spelling errors—such as “campares,” “diffirent,” and “Janpan”—also reduce clarity. Use precise chart language and the correct unit: for example, “hours spent studying” rather than “study rate.” Proofreading country names and common words would make your meaning more accessible.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a mixture of simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can identify some intended comparisons. However, the longer structures are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence formation, verb forms, articles, and punctuation make the relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “the study rate in Janpan is peak at in all above the three countries” has an incorrect verb pattern and unclear construction, while “Finally, In Germany is smilier to stand at 7%” lacks a clear subject and verb structure. Commas and spaces are also inconsistently used. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses such as “whereas” or “while.”

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