Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This is a bar chart shows the typical weeday in three different countries . The countries names are UK, Japan,Germany now we talk about uk sleping time almost 8.5 this average is higer as compare to the other countries beacuse japan has 7 average and germany has 8 average and if we can about the study of japan they gose to 13 which is top of the line if we see on other countries uk has has 8 ratio and germany has 9 ratio of study in their country and the last uk people realax almost 7 and japan people are the hard working people the take very minimum time and the germany realxing time ration is almost 7 so this is the chart we can see in the chart they tell us about the sleeping,studying,and relaxing weekday of the students in three diiferent countries that is uk, japan, and germany

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You report the main categories and several figures accurately: for example, UK sleeping is 8.5 hours, Japan studying is 13, and relaxing is 7 hours in both the UK and Germany. You also identify Japan’s study figure as the highest. However, the response only partially summarises the chart: it has no clear overview of the main contrasts, and most figures are listed in one long passage rather than selected and compared systematically. The claim that Japanese students are “hard working” is an unsupported judgement; describe the data instead, noting that they study more and relax less than students in the other countries. A clearer overview and more balanced comparisons would make the key features easier to understand.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a broadly understandable order, moving from the countries to sleeping, studying and relaxing, and words such as “and” and “if” attempt to connect ideas. However, nearly all the information is packed into one sentence-like paragraph, so there is little clear progression or separation between an overview and supporting details. Repeated phrasing such as “if we see” and “the chart” makes the links mechanical, while the reference in “they gose to 13” is not immediately clear. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and one or two comparison paragraphs. Use precise links such as “By contrast” and “Meanwhile” to show how the figures relate.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing the chart, including “average,” “study,” “sleeping,” and “relaxing,” and the reader can generally identify the intended comparisons. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or informal, such as “top of the line,” “ratio of study,” and “hard working people.” Frequent spelling errors—including “weeday,” “sleping,” “higer,” and “realax”—also make the writing less clear and weaken control of vocabulary. Choose standard chart language and check spelling carefully. For example, describe the figures as “hours spent studying” rather than a “ratio,” and use “the highest figure” instead of “top of the line.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect several ideas using clauses, as in “if we can about the study of japan,” but the sentence structures are often incomplete or faulty, and the long run-on construction makes relationships between points difficult to follow. Examples include “This is a bar chart shows,” which lacks a correct clause structure, and “the take very minimum time,” where the subject and verb do not agree. Articles, capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistently controlled, as in “the countries names are UK” and the missing sentence breaks throughout. Use shorter, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and practise comparison patterns such as “Japan’s figure is higher than Germany’s.”

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