Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart indicate the weekday for students such as metioned countries over their Uk,Japan,Germany.To opine that In this graph indicated 3 colours which is blue, red, green and number 0 to 14 which is related to life cycle. Japanies students doing plathora studying 13 rather then germany 9 or uk 8. However the sleeping cycle is high in uk 8.5 on the other hand japan 7 and germany 8 sleeping less.Therefor japan 4 had lots of studying thats why they did less relaxing moreover uk relaxing graph indicated 7 and germany is also 7. This graph featured japan has most potential and they work very hard.Last but not the least uk and germany did balanced life with their studying, sleeping or relaxing uk is slightly lessure.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main contrast: Japanese students spend the most time studying, while UK and German students have similar relaxing figures. Several reported values are accurate, including Japan’s 13 hours of study and 4 hours of relaxation, and the UK and Germany’s 7 hours of relaxation. However, the response only partially summarises the chart: it gives little clear overview of the three countries’ weekday patterns and omits useful comparisons, such as Germany studying 9 hours versus the UK’s 8. The claim that Japanese students “work very hard” is an unsupported interpretation rather than a chart feature. The response is also 23 words below the required minimum. Add a concise overview and develop the comparisons using the chart’s figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic sequence of comparisons, moving from studying to sleeping and then relaxing, and linking words such as “However,” “on the other hand,” and “moreover” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, with no clear introduction, overview, or organised detail. Some links do not express the relationship clearly: “Therefor japan 4 had lots of studying” makes the connection between relaxation and study difficult to follow. The final sentence introduces a general conclusion without clearly summarising the data. Separate the response into paragraphs and group comparisons logically, using references such as “By contrast” only where the figures support a contrast.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “studying,” “sleeping,” “relaxing,” and “balanced life,” so the reader can identify the chart’s broad subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the description unclear or unnatural. “Japanies” and “plathora” are misspelled, while “life cycle” does not accurately describe the chart’s hours. Phrases such as “most potential” and “sleeping cycle” are also unsuitable for reporting these figures. Aim for precise chart language, for example “spend time studying” and “hours of sleep,” and use neutral descriptions rather than judging students’ effort. More accurate collocations would make the comparisons easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to combine ideas using contrast and cause, but sentence structures are mostly limited and several are difficult to follow. The opening, “The bar chart indicate the weekday,” has subject–verb disagreement and does not form a clear description. In “Japanies students doing plathora studying 13 rather then germany 9 or uk 8,” the verb pattern and sentence structure are incomplete, making the comparison hard to read. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, especially in country names and the run-on sequence of clauses. Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “Japanese students study for 13 hours, compared with 9 hours in Germany and 8 in the UK.” Check agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries when editing.

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