Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar graph illustrates the proprotion of the action for a student in weekday in UK, Japan and Germany.

Overall, it is evident tha Japan accounted for lowest percentage in sleeping and relaxing, while it reached it's peak in studying.

Whereas, UK and Germany saw almost equal amount of participation in all three actions.

In the United kingdoms, sleeping accounted as highest ratio at 8.5%,followed by studying stands at 8% and the lowest proprotion in realxing at 7%. However, in Germany, sleeping stands at 8%, the studying accounted at 9% which is the highest action in the Germany and relaxing(7%) the lowest.

On the contarary, Japan holding the highest proportion in studies at 13%, sleeping stands at gerater than the half of the studies at 7% and relaxing which is the lower percentage action in chart with 4%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern accurately: Japan has the lowest figures for sleeping and relaxing but the highest for studying, while the UK and Germany are broadly similar. The reported values are also correct, including Japan’s 13 hours of study and 4 hours of relaxation. This gives the response a clear overview and relevant comparisons. However, the overview’s phrase “almost equal amount of participation in all three actions” is imprecise: the UK and Germany are similar, but their figures are not equal, and studying differs by an hour. Some details are less fully explained, such as the contrast between Japan’s study time and the other countries. The response is also 12 words below the required minimum, limiting the development of its comparisons. Add a fuller comparison of the largest differences.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a sensible overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs covering the UK and Germany before Japan. This makes the country-by-country organisation easy to follow. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Whereas,” and “On the contrary” help signal relationships, although “Whereas” is awkwardly placed as a sentence opening after a full stop, and “On the contrary” does not express a direct contradiction here. The UK and Germany are grouped together, but the comparison between them is not developed clearly; the paragraph mainly lists each country’s figures in turn. Use more precise links such as “By comparison” and “Similarly,” and connect the figures directly to show how the countries resemble or differ from one another.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of chart vocabulary, including “accounted,” “proportion,” “peak,” and “lowest,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “proportion of the action,” “highest ratio,” and “Japan holding the highest proportion in studies.” There are also spelling errors in “proprotion,” “realxing,” “contarary,” and “gerater,” which reduce the accuracy of the vocabulary. The repeated use of “stands” and “accounted” also makes the description less flexible. Aim for standard expressions such as “spent eight hours sleeping” or “the figure for studying was highest,” and check spelling carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of sentence forms, including a complex overview with “while” and comparisons introduced by “followed by.” However, control is inconsistent, and several sentences contain errors in verb forms, articles, or sentence construction. For example, “Japan holding the highest proportion” lacks a finite verb, while “the studying accounted at 9%” uses an incorrect grammatical pattern. “Sleeping accounted as highest ratio” also needs a clearer structure, such as “Sleeping was the highest figure.” Punctuation and spacing are uneven, as in “8.5%,followed,” and the apostrophe in “it's” is incorrect for the possessive form. Practise building accurate comparison sentences with “the figure for” and “was,” then proofread for complete clauses and punctuation.

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