Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In my point of view the cart is very importat due to that show and discuss an important thing, the chart show that the students in Japan sped the most time of studing houre so we can expect the results will be heights, also sleep time is shortest in the chart , but i the the relaxing te is very short and not enough, however the UK students division is near to be equaly thats will give them a quiet results with enough sleeping and relaxing time, Germany students allocat 9 hours of studing daily and it is a substantial impovemt at their growth and progress, to be honest i go with UK and Germany deu to enough r

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify some relevant features: Japan has the most study time, the least sleep, and the least relaxation, while the UK’s three figures are relatively balanced. However, the response does not provide a clear, objective summary of the chart. It gives no numerical comparisons and adds unsupported predictions and opinions, such as expecting Japan’s results to be higher and saying the UK and Germany will have “quiet results.” Germany’s study figure is also described as an “improvement,” which the chart does not show. The response is 119 words, below the required 150, and ends mid-sentence. To address the task more fully, report the key figures accurately and include a concise overview without speculation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to move through the countries and compare their routines, and linking words such as “also,” “however,” and “to be honest” show an effort to connect ideas. Nevertheless, the response is presented as one long, difficult-to-follow sentence rather than a clearly organised report. The sequence shifts from Japan to the UK and Germany, then to a personal preference, without a distinct overview or paragraph structure. Some links express opinion rather than relationships between chart data, and the final phrase, “due to enough r,” is incomplete. Organise the response into an overview and a paragraph of comparisons, using clear sentence boundaries and references to the figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response includes some task-related vocabulary, including “studying,” “sleeping,” “relaxing,” and “allocat[e],” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is basic and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand: “importat,” “studing houre,” “heights,” and “impovemt” appear to be intended as “important,” “study hours,” “higher,” and “improvement.” Phrases such as “quiet results” and “the chart show” do not express the intended meaning naturally. Use precise terms for time and comparisons, such as “spend,” “hours,” “highest,” and “lowest,” and check spelling and collocations before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses and connectors, for example in “the chart show that the students in Japan…” and “however the UK students division…”. However, sentence structures are very limited and errors occur frequently, sometimes obscuring meaning. Examples include subject–verb agreement (“the chart show”), missing or incorrect articles and prepositions (“due to that show”), and unclear clause construction (“but i the the relaxing…”). Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, with most ideas joined by commas and the final sentence left unfinished. Practise writing complete sentences with one main comparison each, checking agreement and article use, then use a small number of accurate complex clauses.

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