Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar charts illustrates the daily rotiune of student in three various countries namely,the UK, Japan,Germany.

over all, it is clear that ,weekends the students spend in more time for studying.while japan,expericed in most significant fluctuation number of syudent.yet showed an upward trends.

In japan,comparing to others countries japan reached higher in studing for 13 but relaxing time vdecline rose it only 4. at top of that sleeping activites rapidly increasing . While Germany stude

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the countries and some relevant comparisons, including Japan’s 13 hours of studying and 4 hours of relaxing. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: it gives no complete account of the three activities across all countries, and the overview is inaccurate. The chart shows weekday routines, not weekends, and Japan’s studying is the highest figure rather than evidence of an overall upward trend. The statement that sleeping is “rapidly increasing” is also unsupported by a chart comparing countries, not change over time. The response is substantially below the required 150 words, leaving the main features and comparisons undeveloped. To improve, give an accurate overview and report the key figures for each country and activity.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: it begins with an introduction, gives an overview, and then starts a country comparison. Linking expressions such as “overall,” “while,” and “in Japan” show an effort to connect ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview mixes unrelated claims, comparisons are not presented in a consistent order, and the final sentence breaks off at “While Germany stude”. Several ideas run together without clear sentence boundaries. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the main comparisons, and group information by activity or country. Complete each sentence and use linking words only where the relationship between the figures is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “studying,” “relaxing,” “sleeping,” “higher,” and “fluctuation,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “rotiune,” “syudent,” and “vdecline rose.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise: “reached higher in studying” and “at top of that” do not clearly describe the chart. Choose standard chart language and use it accurately, for example, “spent the most time studying” or “relaxing accounted for four hours.” Proofreading spelling and avoiding unsupported terms such as “fluctuation” would make the comparisons clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to use more than simple statements, including a comparison beginning “In Japan, comparing to other countries…” and a contrast introduced by “while.” However, sentence structures are very limited and frequent errors sometimes obscure meaning. For example, “The bar charts illustrates” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “over all, it is clear that, weekends…” lacks a complete, well-formed clause. The final phrase, “While Germany stude,” is incomplete. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, with several clauses joined without clear boundaries. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement, articles, and punctuation before adding complex comparisons.

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