Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar charts demonstrates the typical weekday for students in three different countries such as UK, Japan, and Germany.
To begin with, Japan had the highest proportion for studying, at around 13. This figure had the lowest for relaxing at almost 4 and in sleeping accounted for 7.
Furthermore, UK had stood highest for sleeping at roughly 8.5 while it slightly decrease in sleeping at 8 and relaxing at nearly 7 .
Moreover, Germany had the highest proportion for studying at approximately 9, it gradually decreased in both sleeping and relaxing at around 7 to 8 students
Overall, japan had the highest proportion of studying and the lowest proportion in relaxing. However, Uk had also the highest proportion of sleeping
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You identify the main contrast correctly: Japan records the most study time (13 hours) and the least relaxing time (4), while the UK has the most sleep (8.5). Germany’s study figure of 9 is also reported accurately. However, the response is only 111 words, below the 150-word minimum, so there is limited space to select and explain the key comparisons. Some details are unclear or inaccurate: the UK’s 8 hours is for studying, not a decrease in sleeping, and Germany’s sleeping and relaxing figures are 8 and 7 respectively, rather than a range of “around 7 to 8 students.” The overview repeats Japan’s extremes but does not clearly summarise the overall pattern across all three activities.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic structure, with an opening, country-by-country paragraphs and a concluding overview. Linking expressions such as “To begin with,” “Furthermore” and “Moreover” help signal movement between points. However, the progression is somewhat mechanical, and the country-by-country sequence makes comparisons between countries difficult to follow. Some links do not clarify the relationship between the figures, while the UK sentence combines sleeping, studying and relaxing in a confusing way. The final overview repeats information already given rather than drawing the comparisons together. Grouping the figures by activity, or using clearer comparative sentences, would create a more coherent progression and make the relationships easier to understand.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “highest proportion,” “lowest proportion” and “approximately,” and the reader can generally understand which activities you are describing. However, the range is limited and some expressions are imprecise or unnatural for reporting hours. “Proportion” suggests a share of a whole, whereas the chart gives time; “highest for sleeping” is also less precise than saying students spent the most time sleeping. The phrase “decreased in both sleeping and relaxing” does not clearly express the comparisons, and “around 7 to 8 students” mislabels the figures as people rather than hours. Use a wider set of accurate terms for time and comparisons, such as “spent,” “recorded” and “compared with.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, but control is uneven, and several errors make the comparisons difficult to interpret. The opening has subject–verb disagreement in “The bar charts demonstrates.” In “UK had stood highest,” the verb form is unsuitable, and “it slightly decrease” has an incorrect tense and agreement. The sentence beginning “Germany had the highest proportion for studying” joins two independent ideas with a comma, while the final overview has inconsistent capitalisation of country names. Sentence patterns are also repetitive, with many clauses beginning with a country name followed by “had.” Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build clear comparative sentences, checking agreement, verb forms and punctuation.
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