Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illistarate the week day spend by student in different way in three countries.

The student of japan study more and relax less then on week day.The relaxing of uk students ,sleeping of of japan students and the relaxing of germany students the level are same on weekend.And studying and sleeping level of uk and germany students are same.

In uk at weekend the students sleeping level is 8.5 , study level is 8 and relaxing level is 7.

In japan week day students study level is 13 sleeping level is 7 and relaxing is 4.

In germany sleeping is 8 ,study at 9 and relaxing is at 7 pionts.

The different levels of tasks of student in 3 country.In uk levels are approximately same but japan its totally different ratios and germany 1 point is or more between three levels of students to spend their weekend in their own way.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You report the main figures for all three countries, including Japan’s high study figure (13 hours) and lower relaxation figure (4), and give the UK and Germany values as well. These details show an attempt to compare the categories. However, the overview is unclear and includes a major misreading: “the relaxing of uk students, sleeping of japan students and the relaxing of germany students” are not the same; the chart shows 7, 7, and 7, but these are different activities, so they cannot be treated as a shared category. The claim that UK and Germany have the same studying and sleeping levels is also inaccurate. Focus the overview on the clearest patterns: Japan studies most and relaxes least, while UK and Germany have similar relaxation figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic sequence: an opening statement, some comparisons, and then figures for each country. This gives the reader a rough route through the information. However, ideas are not arranged into clear, purposeful paragraphs, and several sentences are difficult to follow, particularly the long comparison beginning “The relaxing of uk students…”. Connections between points are also weak: “And” starts a sentence without clarifying the relationship, while “The different levels of tasks…” repeats the comparison rather than drawing it together. Grouping the overview separately from the country details, and using clear links such as “By contrast” or “Similarly,” would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use relevant basic terms such as “sleeping,” “study,” “relaxing,” and “levels,” so the reader can identify the chart categories and understand the general subject. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several word choices or collocations make the meaning awkward, including “week day spend,” “study level,” and “different ratios.” There are also spelling errors such as “illistarate” and “pionts,” which reduce clarity. Aim for accurate chart language and vary the way you describe values and comparisons. For example, use “hours spent studying” rather than “study level,” and “the figures are similar” rather than “the level are same.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use simple structures, and the country-by-country statements generally communicate the intended figures. However, grammatical errors occur frequently and sometimes make relationships unclear. Examples include “The student of japan study more,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “the level are same,” which has an agreement error and lacks an article. The sentence beginning “The different levels of tasks…” is not a complete, well-formed sentence. There is little evidence of controlled complex sentence structures, and punctuation and spacing are inconsistent. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and complete sentences before adding more complex comparisons.

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