Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The ball above shows the typical weekdays for students from 3 different , UK, Japand and Germany. ItShows in the bawtry dead 8.5% of students from the UK spends there typical weekdays sleeping while germany is in the second placeWell Japanese students is at 7% which is the lowest percentage of students that sleeps in the typical weekdays, it shows in the chart that the Japanese students mostly spend their days studying, followed by germany and UK. 4% of Japanese students relaxes on their weekdays, while both UK and germany got the same percentage of students that relaxes on their typical weekdays.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the three countries and report several relevant comparisons, including Japan’s highest study figure and its lower relaxation figure, as well as the equal relaxation values for the UK and Germany. However, the response is incomplete: it contains 102 words, below the required 150, and gives no clear overview of the main pattern across all three activities. Some figures are also misreported as percentages, although the chart shows hours; for example, UK sleeping is 8.5 hours, not 8.5%. Germany’s sleeping value is not clearly stated, and the study figures are described without reporting their values. To improve, add a concise overview and accurately compare the key figures for sleeping, studying and relaxing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise information by activity: you mention sleeping first, then studying, and finally relaxing. Linking phrases such as “while” and “followed by” also show an effort to connect comparisons. However, the response is presented as one long, difficult-to-follow sequence, with ideas running together and little clear progression. The opening is not separated as an introduction, and there is no distinct overview or organised body paragraph. Some references, such as “it” in “it shows in the chart,” are unclear. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the detailed comparisons, and connect each point with clear, accurate transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant words, including “sleeping,” “studying,” “relax,” “lowest” and “same,” so the reader can recognise the activities being compared. However, the vocabulary is limited and repetitive, and several word choices or spellings make the meaning harder to follow. Examples include “ball” for “bar chart,” “bawtry” and “Japand”; “spends their typical weekdays sleeping” is also an awkward way to describe the data. Repeated use of “students” and “typical weekdays” limits variety. Build a more precise range for describing chart data, such as “hours spent,” “accounted for,” “respectively” and “the highest figure,” while checking spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example by using “while” to contrast the countries, and the basic meaning is often recoverable. However, sentence boundaries and agreement are not controlled consistently. The opening runs into the next idea without clear punctuation, and “students … spends” and “students … relaxes” use singular verbs with plural subjects. In “both UK and germany got the same percentage,” the sentence lacks an appropriate verb form and article structure. Most of the response relies on simple clauses joined together, with little variety in sentence patterns. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and divide comparisons into complete sentences, using a mix of simple and compound structures.

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