Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

looking at the chart there showing how students spend there week day in three different countries japan Germany and UK.Japan has the highes number of students studying in while UK is the last after the second which is germany.Japan has the lowest number is students relaxing while UK has the highest number students relaxing. UK has the highest number of students sleeping on weekdays while japan has the lowest number of students sleeping on weekdays.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify several genuine comparisons: Japan has the most study time, the least relaxation time, and the least sleep, while the UK has the most relaxation time. However, the response is very brief and reports only a few features, with no clear overview of the overall pattern or supporting figures. One comparison is inaccurate: Germany, at 9 hours, is not second after Japan for studying; the UK, at 8 hours, is second. The UK also does not have the most sleep: its 8.5 hours is slightly above Germany’s 8, but the chart’s highest figure is Japan’s 13 hours of studying, not a sleep figure. The required minimum of 150 words is not met. Include an overview and accurate figures for all three activities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response groups related comparisons together, moving from studying to relaxing and then sleeping, so the reader can follow its basic topic sequence. However, it is presented as one continuous run-on passage, without an introduction, overview, or paragraph breaks to distinguish the main features from details. Connections between ideas are also limited: repeated use of “while” does some linking, but the comparisons are not consistently expressed in a clear, parallel structure. For example, “Japan has the highest… while UK is the last after the second” is difficult to interpret. Organise the report into a short introduction, an overview, and a detail paragraph, and use clear comparison phrases such as “whereas” or “by contrast” accurately.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small set of relevant terms, including “studying,” “relaxing,” “sleeping,” and “highest” or “lowest,” which makes the general subject understandable. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and some phrases are imprecise or awkward, such as “the last after the second” and “the highest number students relaxing.” The repeated phrase “number of students” is also unsuitable because the chart compares hours spent on activities, not numbers of students. Use precise chart language such as “hours spent studying” and “the greatest amount of time,” and vary comparison vocabulary. Check spelling and word forms, including “highest” and “weekday,” to make the report clearer and more appropriate for an academic summary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response relies almost entirely on simple present-tense statements, with little variety in sentence structure. Several sentences contain grammatical errors that make the comparisons harder to understand. For example, “Japan has the lowest number is students relaxing” has an incorrect clause structure, and “UK is the last” is missing the article “the.” The opening also runs several clauses together without appropriate sentence boundaries: “looking at the chart there showing…” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, including the lowercase opening and country names. Aim for complete, clearly punctuated sentences and practise comparison structures such as “Japan spends the most time studying, at 13 hours, whereas…” This would improve both accuracy and range.

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