Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the bar chart illustrates the typical weekday for students in three different countries.the chart compared the the three namely countries one is UK 2end is japan and for is germany.students inUK spend aproximately 8.5 hours sleeping ,8 hourous they usuually spend studying and aproximateliy they spend 7 houro while relaxing.whenpeople in japan spend 7 hour sleeping and there study tome is high then any other country they spend usually13 hour studyingbwhile they spend only 4 hour sleeping they are more afficient people as copare the people of UK an GERMONY.

THE PEOPLE OF GERMaNY SPEND almost 8hours in sleeping and approximately nine hour in study and the people of germany spend usuallyseven in sleeping .so thisbar chart copares the three types of people about three countries those who spend more of their time in study are peiple of jepan and then people of germonay and on number three there are people of UK

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the three countries and report several relevant figures, including the UK’s 8.5 hours of sleep and Japan’s 13 hours of study. You also recognise that Japan studies the most, followed by Germany and the UK. However, the response only partly fulfils the task: it has no clear overview of the main comparisons across all three activities, and some details are inaccurate. For example, Japan sleeps for 7 hours, not 4; 4 hours is its relaxing time. The final sentence also says Germany spends seven hours sleeping, although this is its relaxing figure. The claim that Japanese students are “more efficient” is unsupported by the chart. The response is 145 words, five short of the 150-word minimum; nine words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organisation: the response begins by introducing the chart, then discusses the UK, Japan and Germany, and ends with a comparison of study time. This gives the reader a general sense of the intended sequence. However, progression is difficult to follow because the information is crowded into long, poorly separated sentences, with no clear paragraphing or distinct overview. Connections such as “when” and “so” do not always show the relationship between ideas accurately, and the repeated country-by-country descriptions make comparisons hard to track. Grouping the main features—for example, comparing study hours across all countries, then sleep and relaxation—would create a clearer progression and make the comparisons easier to understand.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “bar chart,” “spend,” “hours,” “sleeping,” “studying” and “relaxing,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “study tome,” “more afficient” and “number three” for ranking the countries. Frequent spelling errors—including “aproximately,” “germonay” and “jepan”—also make the response less clear and less precise. The phrase “more efficient people” introduces an interpretation that the chart does not support. Aim to use accurate reporting language such as “spent,” “accounted for” and “the highest figure,” and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would help you describe comparisons without adding unsupported claims.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to combine information in longer sentences, for example when comparing Japan with the UK and Germany, but these structures are often difficult to follow. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are frequently missing: the opening runs several sentences together, and “whenpeople in japan…” begins without a clear grammatical connection to the previous idea. There are also errors in articles, agreement and sentence construction, as in “the three namely countries one is UK” and “those who spend more of their time in study are peiple.” The response relies mainly on simple present-tense statements and does not show reliable control of more complex forms. Use shorter, complete sentences first, with clear subjects and verbs, then add comparisons using structures such as “whereas” or “while.”

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