Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this line graph, it indicates the 24 hours sleeping, studying and the relaxing schedule of different countries.

In the beginning, the UK and Germany sleep rate is very advantageous for students. They take maximum eight to nine hours of sleep which is a necessary for their studies. While on the other hand, Japan sleep rate are very low.In addition, the figures for studing in the Uk and Germany are identical.Morever, Japan studies hours are climbs which is very badly affected on students mental health.Furthermore, the relaxing are same in Uk and Germany which is basic for our body.Similarly, Japan rate of relaxing are less then other countries which is very bad affect on students health.

Ultimately, Uk and Germany rate of sleeping and studying are very flexible for students life.In Japan students are struggling to cover big portion of their studies. which are gradually affect on students.So, Japan should take serious action for their students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the three activities and make relevant comparisons, including that Japan has the most study time and least relaxation, while the UK and Germany have the same relaxation figure. However, the response only partially fulfils the chart-summary task: it gives no clear, neutral overview of the main pattern and instead adds unsupported judgements about students’ health and what Japan “should” do. Some figures are also inaccurate or imprecise: UK and Germany study hours are not identical (8 and 9), and Japan’s sleep is described only as “very low” rather than reported as 7 hours. Focus on the data, state the key contrasts accurately, and avoid recommendations or claims the chart cannot establish.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some organisation: the response moves from sleep to study and relaxation, then ends with a concluding statement. Linking expressions such as “In addition,” “Furthermore,” and “Ultimately” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several comparisons and opinions are crowded into one paragraph, and the connectors sometimes imply relationships that are not clear. For example, “Similarly” introduces Japan’s lower relaxation figure, which contrasts rather than resembles the preceding point. Separate the overview from the detailed comparisons, group related figures together, and use linking words only when their logical relationship is accurate. Clearer sentence boundaries would also improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some topic-related vocabulary, including “sleeping,” “studying,” “relaxing,” and “figures,” so the reader can identify the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are noticeably inaccurate, sometimes making the intended meaning unclear. For instance, “sleep rate is very advantageous” does not naturally describe hours spent sleeping, and “Japan studies hours are climbs” is not an appropriate way to report a chart value. There are also spelling and word-form errors, such as “studing,” “Morever,” and “then” where “than” is needed. Build a small set of precise chart-reporting phrases and check spelling and collocation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with linking clauses, but control is inconsistent, and errors frequently affect clarity. Examples include “Japan sleep rate are very low,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “Japan studies hours are climbs,” which has an incorrect verb construction. Articles and sentence structure are also problematic in “which is a necessary for their studies,” while punctuation is weak in places, such as the run-on sequence after “very low.” The final sentence fragment beginning “which are gradually affect” further disrupts meaning. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, complete clauses, and sentence boundaries before adding more complex structures.

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