Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pai charts illustrates the information of three differences country the typical weekday students .

Overall, on weekday students who many sleeping studying and relaxing three countries students like Uk, Japan, Germany that three countries how many students focus on their studies and how may students sleeping most and how many students relaxing at home .

The Uk students sleeping 8.5 for everyday and 7 hours studying for everday same routine and Japan students sleeping time 8 hours and focus studying 13 hours and other personal activities and German students sleeping 7 hours per day and they are focus on their studies 4 hours everyday . The Uk students relaxing at for everydays 8 hours the second relaxation country of Uk and less focus studying. The highest sleeping relexing country compare of those country Japan because this country sleeping time 8.5 hours and relaxing 9 hours everyday and studying 8 hours only and German relexing 7 hours sleeping 7 hours studying only 4 hour's.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the three countries and the activities, and you attempt to compare their daily routines. However, several key figures are misreported: Japan’s sleeping time is 7 hours, not 8 or 8.5; its relaxing time is 4 hours, not 9; and Germany’s studying time is 9 hours, not 4. The UK figures are also confused: it has 8.5 hours of sleep, 8 hours of study and 7 hours of relaxation. These inaccuracies make the main comparisons unreliable, and the overview does not clearly state the chart’s most important features, such as Japan having the most study time and least relaxation. Focus on accurately selecting the highest and lowest values before describing details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an opening, an overview-like paragraph and a body paragraph, so there is an attempt to organise the information. However, the ideas are not arranged coherently enough for the reader to follow the comparisons. The overview repeats the activity labels without stating a clear pattern, while the final paragraph moves between countries and activities in a confusing order. For example, “The highest sleeping relexing country compare” introduces a comparison that is difficult to interpret. Use a clearer sequence: give the overall contrasts first, then compare each activity across the three countries. Basic linking words such as “while” and “whereas” can help show these relationships.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “sleeping,” “studying,” “relaxing,” “hours” and “focus,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and inaccurate word choice or spelling often makes the meaning difficult to understand. Phrases such as “three differences country,” “other personal activities” and “highest sleeping relexing country” are not natural or precise descriptions of chart data. There are also repeated spelling errors, including “pai charts,” “everydays” and “relexing.” Build a small set of accurate expressions for reporting figures and comparisons, such as “spent,” “the highest figure,” and “compared with,” and check spelling before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to form longer sentences and use time expressions, but sentence structures are very limited and frequent errors affect clarity. For example, “The pai charts illustrates” has problems with the subject and verb, while “The Uk students sleeping 8.5 for everyday” lacks a correctly formed verb and a clear grammatical pattern. Articles, plurals and agreement are also often missing or inaccurate, as in “three differences country” and “students like Uk, Japan, Germany.” Most sentences combine several ideas without reliable punctuation, making relationships hard to follow. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, such as “UK students slept for 8.5 hours, while Japanese students slept for 7,” then add more complex structures once these are controlled.

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