Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart gives information about students in three different countries between 0 -14.

overall,The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries such as;- uk,japan,germany including sleeing ,studying, relaxing.

The chart gives the information and main feature, of the typical weekday for students the highest studying students is from japan ie;,13 of bar graph as shown above and there is steady in uk and germany for study ie;,8 similarly japan and uk has same relaxing students during weekend and the lowest relaxing is in japan ie;,4.

on the other hand,regaring the sleeping uk has the highest number ie;,8.5 of overall bar graph and slightly equal to germany and lowest sleeping is in japan and highest studying is in japan

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify relevant categories and countries, and correctly note Japan’s highest study figure (13), its lowest relaxation figure (4), and the UK’s highest sleeping figure (8.5). However, the response is incomplete: it has no clear, accurate overview of the main comparisons, and the claim that the UK and Japan have the same relaxation figure is incorrect (7 versus 4). Germany’s figures and several comparisons are not adequately reported. The response also contains only 111 words, below the required 150, which limits the detail available. To improve, give a concise overview of the main highs and lows, then accurately compare all three countries across sleeping, studying and relaxing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, with an opening, an overview-like paragraph and a further comparison introduced by “on the other hand.” The reader can identify the general subject and some key figures. However, the ideas do not progress clearly: the second paragraph repeats the task description, while the next combines several comparisons in a long, difficult-to-follow sentence. The final sentence is unfinished in effect and repeats that Japan has the highest studying figure. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the detailed comparisons, and group information by activity or country. Clearer sentence boundaries and more precise linking would make the relationships between figures easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “typical weekday,” “studying,” “relaxing,” “highest” and “lowest,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and some expressions are inaccurate or awkward, such as “highest studying students,” “steady in uk and germany for study,” and “of overall bar graph.” Spelling errors such as “sleeing” and “regaring” also reduce clarity. Aim to describe the amount of time rather than the students themselves, and use accurate chart language such as “spent studying” or “recorded.” A wider range of precise verbs and comparison phrases would help you report the data more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example when comparing studying and relaxing, but control is limited and errors frequently make the relationships unclear. The opening, “The chart gives information about students … between 0 -14,” lacks a clear grammatical description of what the figures represent. Other problems include missing or misplaced articles, inconsistent capitalisation, and sentence-boundary errors: “overall,The bar chart…” and “on the other hand,regaring…” run into the following text. The response relies mainly on simple clauses and does not show a controlled range of sentence forms. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check punctuation, articles and agreement before submitting.

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