Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrate the typical weekend of students in three different countries.

Overall, including all three country students like to sleeping, studying and relaxing.

Redarding,the students in uk are more active and like sleeping as well as studying for better future.In Japan Studying was the highest with 13 but in uk and Germany the rate is 8 and 9 .In all three countries the sleeping rate of students is different form each other where uk has the 8.5,japan has 7 and Germany has 8.In the country uk nad Germany there is little change only in all sleeping,studing and relaxing.

looking at the remaining groups Uk and Germany shows the contrasting ternd,with figures shows the slight increase and decrease in both country's respectively .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the three countries and reports several relevant figures, including Japan’s study time of 13 hours and the sleeping figures for all three countries. However, it only partially summarises the chart: the overview, “students like to sleeping, studying and relaxing,” does not identify the main contrasts, and the discussion of relaxing time omits its values (7 hours in the UK and Germany, and 4 in Japan). The claim that UK students are “more active” is not supported by the data, and the final comparison is unclear. The response also describes a “weekend” rather than the typical weekday. It is 26 words below the required minimum, leaving the key features underdeveloped. A clearer overview and accurate comparisons across all three activities are needed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, with an opening, an overview, and a paragraph containing comparisons. Some information is grouped by country or activity, and phrases such as “In Japan” and “looking at the remaining groups” signal movement between points. However, the progression is difficult to follow: the final paragraph repeats the UK–Germany comparison without explaining what “contrasting trend” means, while the earlier paragraph shifts abruptly between studying and sleeping. Linking is limited and sometimes inaccurate, as in “In the country uk nad Germany.” Use a clearer sequence—overview, then the most important comparisons—and connect each figure directly to the activity and country it describes.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “rate,” “figures,” “highest,” “increase,” and “decrease,” so the reader can recognise the intended topic. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “students like to sleeping” describes preference rather than time spent, and “more active” is not a precise description of the chart. Spelling errors such as “Redarding,” “ternd,” and “studing” also reduce clarity. Aim for precise reporting language and accurate activity labels, such as “spent,” “hours,” and “time devoted to.” Check spelling carefully and avoid vague phrases like “little change” when comparing fixed figures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and longer sentence forms, including a comparison beginning “In Japan Studying was the highest…” and a sentence using “where” to introduce figures. However, the range remains limited, and errors are frequent enough to make some sentences hard to follow. Examples include “The bar chart illustrate,” where subject–verb agreement is incorrect, and “In the country uk nad Germany there is little change,” which has faulty sentence construction and unclear agreement. The sentence beginning “looking at the remaining groups” also lacks a clear grammatical structure. Use complete, direct sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles, capitalisation, and punctuation. Shorter accurate comparisons would improve control before attempting more complex structures.

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