Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Smoking is very dangerous for health. Many serious health problems cause by smoking and should be taken some steps like made it illegal. I agree with this point of view.

For a good health people need to step out from smoking. It create a lot of health problems sometimes it takes a person life. That's why people need to careful about this problems. It is not only creates a person's life also others life who sit down beside the person. Some diseases like Cancer, Heart problem, Asthma cause by smoking. For this people can not work for long time that's why his family suffer. If people want to enjoy his life properly then that person need to give up from smoking. Because a smoker person do not lives for a long time in their life and also they suffer a lot of problems.

People can lives a healthy life when they have no physical problems. So every person needs to take some steps against the smoking. We should understand other people that smoking creates many dangerous issues as if they are abandon smoking. Also the government gives some restictions against it and the smoking company. Every person and government should be made it illegal. We need to be careful as if children do not smoke. Because in today's time we see most of the children suffers from disease.

To sum up, i believe that many people face many serious illnesses for smoking. It is the high time to stop this topic and band smoke so people can not smoke later.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear in the introduction and conclusion: you agree that smoking should be stopped or made illegal. You also give relevant reasons, including harm to smokers, second-hand smoke, and effects on families and children. These points show an understanding of the topic, but the response addresses the proposal only partially because it does not explain why making smoking illegal would be effective or consider possible objections, such as personal freedom or enforcement. Several claims, including that smokers “do not lives for a long time,” remain broad and unsupported. Develop fewer points with specific explanation or an example, and distinguish between discouraging smoking and banning it outright, to make your argument more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The ideas generally relate to the central position, and connectors such as “That’s why,” “Because” and “To sum up” help signal relationships. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the second paragraph moves from health effects to family hardship and then to giving up smoking without developing the links. Repeated references to “people” and “smoking,” along with several sentences beginning with “Because” or “If,” make the flow repetitive. Some references, such as “this problems” and “this topic,” are unclear. Organise each body paragraph around one main reason and use clearer links between claim, explanation and consequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “serious illnesses,” “health problems,” “government” and “children.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning less clear. Examples include “step out from smoking,” “give up from smoking,” “restictions,” and “band smoke.” Some expressions are also vague or unnatural, such as “stop this topic” and “enjoy his life properly.” Aim to learn common collocations for health and public policy, and choose precise terms such as “quit smoking,” “second-hand smoke” and “ban tobacco sales.” Check spelling and avoid repeating the same general words when a more specific term is available.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “If people want to enjoy his life properly…” and a reason clause beginning “Because.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction. For example, “Many serious health problems cause by smoking” needs a passive verb, while “It create” and “people can lives” show agreement and verb-form problems. In “It is not only creates a person's life also others life,” the structure is difficult to follow. These errors can make the reader pause to interpret your meaning. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and complete sentence patterns before adding more complex clauses.

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