Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

While, some people argue that the smoking can cause several serious health proplem and should be totally ban it and recognaise it as illegal, I agree with that for several resones.

One of the most major reseno, segarite have a chemical proceess most of health orginisation definet it as a hurmfull. It affect on the helath people directly and that will lead people to suffer. In addition, smoking can lead the body to activate the cancers cells, that's means that will not affect on the person only the goverment will take a responsbilty to treat those pepole. For example, most of country they add a warrning on the segarits backing, that the smoking can cuse a several illnesses like a cancer, heart attack ,etc.

On the other hand, Smoking can produce a bad smell in the places, people and even in the public area.Moreover, smoking can affact on the enviroment, although the empact is too small but still exsist. the people understand that the smoking support the contries economy, while the budget of cancer reovary will be more.For instance, Jordan government paid more than 2 billion JD each year for the cance hosspital, While the income from segarite was less than this number.

In conclousion, While the people argue that the smoking should be illegal, i agree with that due to the several bad thing that can smoking cuses , like a iullness, enviroamant harmful, and economy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a clear position in the introduction and conclusion: you agree that smoking should be illegal. The response gives relevant reasons, including illness, public costs, unpleasant effects in shared spaces, and environmental harm, and the Jordan hospital-cost example adds some support. However, the task is only partially addressed because the reasons are mostly asserted rather than explained; for example, the link between smoking and cancer is unclear, and the economic comparison needs context or evidence. The conclusion also lists points without developing the argument. The response is 13 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to explain and support your ideas. Develop each main reason with a clear explanation and a specific, credible example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The paragraphs broadly group health and economic arguments, and signposts such as “In addition,” “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” help show the intended direction. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow. The second body paragraph moves from smell to environmental effects and then to government income and hospital costs without clearly explaining how these points connect. Some linking phrases are also used mechanically or inaccurately, and punctuation spacing and capitalisation are inconsistent. Organise each paragraph around one central claim, then explain it and give an example; use transitions only where they express the actual relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “serious health problem,” “chemical process,” “environment,” “economy” and “responsibility.” This gives the response a basic range for discussing smoking and its effects. However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are frequent enough to make some phrases difficult to understand, as in “proplem,” “recognaise,” “cance hosspital” and “cancer reovary.” Several expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “activate the cancers cells” and “the budget of cancer recovery.” Aim to learn accurate topic collocations and check spelling carefully. Prefer clear, familiar wording when unsure, and use a dictionary to confirm both the meaning and grammatical form of less familiar terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a clause beginning “although” and a contrast introduced by “while.” However, the range remains limited, and complex attempts often contain errors that make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “smoking can lead the body to activate the cancers cells” has an unclear grammatical structure, while “most of country they add a warning” has problems with sentence construction and agreement. Articles, plurals, verb forms and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “the smoking,” “people understand” and the comma splice in “that’s means that will not affect.” Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Proofread for articles, agreement and sentence boundaries.

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