Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

1.Introduction

2.Effects on body

3.Effect on other people

4.Conclusion

Smoking can cause many diseases and it is very dangerous for human health. It is not only effect the smoking person it effects the other people. It is illegal in our country for those who are under eighteen but the students not avoiding.

Moreover, smoking can cause cancer and many lungs diseases which are very dangerous for human health. There are many poisnous chemicals are present in cigarette these chemicals are called carcinogens. These carcinogens in human body also affect and cause cancer. In addition to this, the smoke of cigarette damage walls of lungs and respiratory track. It cause many respiratory diseases, lungs diseases like asthama.

Smoking is also dangerous for nonsmokers than the smokers. The smoke which is release on the upper side of cigarette is more poisnous than the releasing from the smokers mouth. Inhaling the smoke of cigarette is also called passive smoking. It is very dangerous because it contains more chemicals than the other and it affects the nearist people. For example, father in a family is smoker and surviving in cancer than his daughter also get cancer after sometime. So that's why smoking also affects the nonsmokers.

Furthermore, smoking is illegal in public places like parks, resturents, markets etc. In my oppinion smokin is only waste of money. In this era many types of new smoking devices are available in market and it is named as pods or vapes. Students are also addicted of these vapes and pods. We should try to avoid smoking and not sitting beside the smokers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response gives relevant reasons for opposing smoking, including illness, harm to non-smokers, and its effects on young people. However, the task asks whether smoking should be made illegal, and your position on that specific proposal is not clearly stated or consistently developed. Saying that smoking is illegal for under-eighteens and in public places does not explain whether you support a wider ban. The conclusion-like final paragraph instead says people should avoid smoking and smokers, which is advice rather than a direct answer. The health points are relevant, but some support is unclear or overgeneralised, particularly the example of a smoker’s daughter developing cancer. State your degree of agreement clearly and explain the practical reasons behind it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

Your response has a recognisable paragraph structure: it moves from health effects to passive smoking and then to public smoking and young people. This gives the reader a basic sense of organisation. However, the numbered outline at the beginning is not integrated into the essay, and the progression does not consistently build an argument about whether smoking should be illegal. Linking phrases such as “Moreover,” “In addition to this,” and “Furthermore” help connect points, but they are sometimes mechanical, while references such as “these chemicals” and “the other” are not always precise. The final paragraph introduces vapes and money without clearly connecting them to the central question. Use a clear introduction with your position, focused body paragraphs, and a conclusion that directly answers the prompt.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “carcinogens,” “passive smoking,” “respiratory diseases,” and “nonsmokers,” which helps communicate the subject. There is also some attempt to use more specific language about health effects. However, the range is limited and several spelling, word-choice, and collocation errors make parts less clear, such as “poisnous,” “lungs diseases,” “smokin,” and “nearist people.” Some expressions are imprecise, including “smoke … release on the upper side” and “surviving in cancer.” Aim for accurate, natural combinations and check spelling carefully. For example, use “lung diseases,” “released from the burning end of a cigarette,” and “being treated for cancer” where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The essay mainly uses simple sentences, with a few attempts at longer structures, such as “It is not only effect the smoking person it effects the other people” and the sentence beginning “For example, father in a family…”. These attempts show an effort to connect ideas, but frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “It is not only effect,” “these chemicals are called carcinogens” after “There are,” and “It cause many respiratory diseases.” Several sentences also join separate ideas without suitable punctuation. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using clauses such as “because” and “which.” Check subject–verb agreement and verb forms during proofreading.

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