Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Smoking can cause illnesses and should made illegal.

Yes i am agree because smoking is very dangreous for health and somking distroy different part of body like somking destroy hart, lungs and the other part of body.

Reasons:

In my life in 2015 i like smoking but one i was smoking. smpking destroy my lungs so my family check me took away a hospital . i was admittet in hospital one week.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You clearly agree that smoking should be illegal, and you give a relevant personal example: you describe becoming ill and being admitted to hospital after smoking. However, the response addresses the task only minimally. It does not explain why this experience supports making smoking illegal, consider how a ban might work, or develop other reasons and examples. The brief heading “Reasons:” does not introduce a developed argument, and the conclusion is absent. The response is also substantially below the required 250 words, leaving the position and supporting ideas very limited. To improve, explain your reasons in detail, connect each example to the proposed law, and address the question directly throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic sequence: you state your opinion, introduce “Reasons:”, and then give a personal account. This gives the reader a simple sense of the response’s direction. However, the ideas are not arranged into developed paragraphs, and the account moves abruptly from liking smoking to being taken to hospital. The repeated use of “smoking” and “destroy” does little to show how the points relate, while “one i was smoking” is unclear. Use separate paragraphs for your position, reasons and example, and connect events with clear time and cause-and-effect links. A concluding sentence would also help the response feel complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant topic words, including “smoking,” “health,” “lungs,” and “hospital,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and several spelling errors make the account harder to follow: “dangreous,” “somking,” “distroy,” “hart,” and “admittet.” The phrase “destroy different part of body” is also imprecise; more accurate wording would help explain the health effects. Build a wider range of topic vocabulary, such as “serious illness,” “damage the lungs,” and “hospitalised,” and check spelling carefully. More precise word choice would make your personal example clearer and strengthen your argument.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response relies almost entirely on short, simple sentences, so it shows little variety in grammatical structures. Several errors affect basic sentence formation and make parts of the account difficult to understand. For example, “should made illegal” is missing a passive verb form, and “Yes i am agree” has an incorrect verb construction. In “my family check me took away a hospital,” the sequence of actions and the sentence structure are unclear. There are also problems with tense and sentence boundaries in the personal account. Practise forming complete sentences, using past-tense verbs consistently, and joining related ideas with simple conjunctions. Accurate basic structures should come before attempting longer sentences.

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