Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

smoking can cuase the serious illness because by all the cigarette companies it should written on their box that smoking is injuries to health and it may lead to the mouth cancer smoke habits can drastically effect on our lungs and overall health of our respiratory system by the the one inhaled puff we inhaled alomost 5000 chemicals in our body so its badly effect in our body and have serious illness i am 110 percent agree with it that smoking can destroy us slowly its a slow poison for our body a research on smoking tells us that in every year there are so many people's died due bad lungs health smoking destroy our lungs health it ruins our life the tobacco used in the cigarette have more negative impact on our health body and mostly our lungs my own grandfather have destroyed their lungs due the bad habit of smoking even the doctors when come to see their condition they tells us he will died 5 years early due to this smoking habit their ledt lungs is almost dead due to the smoke of different types of cigarettes so in my opinion the habit of smoking is very deadly to us yes the cigarette in my country made illegal the government shoud habe take some strict actions on the companies that made cigarette and apply a Permanent ban on the manufacturing of cigarette companies by doing this step how many lifes will saved from this serious illness of body

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you strongly agree that smoking is harmful and should be prohibited. You support this with relevant points about respiratory damage, the health warning on cigarette packaging, and your grandfather’s experience. However, the response addresses the health effects much more fully than the proposal to make smoking illegal. The final suggestion of a permanent ban is brief and does not explain how prohibition would work or why it would be preferable to measures such as taxation or restrictions. Some claims, including the number of chemicals inhaled and the annual deaths, are asserted without explanation or a clear example. Develop both the health argument and the case for illegality, and make the reasoning behind your position more explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response contains a recognisable line of thought: it moves from the health risks of smoking to a personal example and then to a recommendation for government action. This gives the reader a basic sense of your argument. However, almost all ideas are placed in one continuous block, and there is little clear progression between them. Repeated links such as “so” and “by doing this step” do not show the relationships between claims precisely, while several points about lung damage are repeated. Use separate paragraphs for the health argument, the personal example, and your policy recommendation. Then connect each point with clear transitions and refer back to the central question of whether smoking should be illegal.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “respiratory system,” “tobacco,” “manufacturing,” and “permanent ban,” which helps communicate your main concerns. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, especially “smoking,” “lungs,” and “health.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice problems, such as “cuase,” “injuries to health,” and “ledt lungs,” which can make the reader pause or infer your meaning. Some combinations are not natural in English, for example “destroy our lungs health.” Build a more precise set of phrases for discussing illness, risk, and government policy, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect several ideas in longer sentences, and the response includes some basic sentence patterns. However, sentence structures are limited, and many sentences run together without full stops or other punctuation, making the argument difficult to follow. Verb forms and agreement are often inaccurate: “people's died” and “the doctors … tells us” do not use the correct forms, while “the government shoud habe take” is not grammatically formed. Articles and possessives also need attention, as in “the serious illness” and “my own grandfather have destroyed their lungs.” Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine ideas using accurate clauses and punctuation.

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