Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Without any qualms, ciggarettes give birth to several health problems and government need to ban it.In light of, smoking not only cause disease but also creates pollution in environment which would be dangers for birds while some individuals consume it for relaxing so i partially agree with the given statement.

To begin with, it goes without saying that smoking creates various health issues such as cancer,astma.That is to say ,it is,infact obvious that ciggarettes contains most of that material which is very harmful form human body particulary to lunges such as nicotine,tobacco which will ban in most of the countries..To quote an instance, various most experienced surgens was said in their past interveiws that smoking is enough to destroy the human lungs completely.and therefore, government needs to ban it to save the valuable lifes of citizens.

Conversely, few part of the country population adopt it as a medium of relaxation after worling long hours.More specifically, a lot of construction site works consumes a penty of ciggarettes in a week.They think that after smoking thier mind feel relax after doing hardwork in site. Due to this higher leaders need to build sepreated areas for smokes,so that comman public do not faces any difficulty,thereby, given above talk mentioned that smoking has various point of veiws.

I sum up, to pen down saying that althought undoubtably smoking is very dangerous for health prospective,it play an vital role in reducing workers stress and offers relax so that leaders need to construct different monuments for those smokers

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the question and give a partly clear position: you support banning smoking because of its health effects, while recognising that some workers use it to relax. The health argument is relevant, with cancer and lung damage as examples. However, the response does not fully resolve the question of whether smoking should be illegal: the conclusion shifts to proposing separate smoking areas, which is different from your opening call for a ban. The pollution point is introduced but not developed, and the claim that smoking helps workers relax needs more explanation and support. Make your degree of agreement consistent throughout, then develop each main reason with a clear explanation or specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two contrasting body paragraphs and a conclusion. Phrases such as “To begin with” and “Conversely” help signal the change in viewpoint, and the main ideas are generally grouped by paragraph. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly where several claims are joined in long sentences. The conclusion also introduces “different monuments” for smokers without clearly linking this proposal to the earlier argument about a ban. Some linking expressions, including “That is to say” and “thereby,” feel mechanical or do not show the relationship between ideas accurately. Use shorter, clearly connected sentences and make each paragraph develop one central point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “health issues,” “pollution,” “nicotine,” “citizens” and “relaxation.” These choices show awareness of the subject, but frequent spelling errors and inaccurate or unnatural word combinations make parts of the response difficult to understand. Examples include “ciggarettes,” “astma,” “lunges,” “valuable lifes” and “a penty of ciggarettes.” Phrases such as “smoking creates various health issues” are understandable, but “smoking is enough to destroy the human lungs completely” is an imprecise overstatement. Build accuracy with common collocations and check spelling carefully; using a smaller set of precise expressions will communicate your ideas more effectively than attempting uncertain phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast introduced by “while” and a result clause beginning “so that.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles and punctuation sometimes make the meaning hard to follow. For example, “government need to ban it” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “smoking not only cause disease” also needs an agreeing verb. The sentence beginning “To quote an instance” runs several clauses together, and punctuation is often missing or misplaced. Practise forming accurate subject–verb patterns and separating independent clauses with full stops. Once these are secure, use complex structures selectively and check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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