Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this modernity, many people are concerned about the smoking that it causes serious health issues and it should be made illegal. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this notion and my opinion will be further discussed in further paragraphs with a suitable conclusion.

Supporting my agreement to the given statement, I firmly believe that smoking is injurious to health. It can lead to many health problems including short breath. Cronic smoking can permanently cause damage to lungs and it can even lead to cancer. For example, the chances of lungs and respiratory tract cancer has increased in smokers because the lungs didn't remain healthy due to toxins released from smoking nicotine and all other related items.

Explaning some of the another supporting points against smoking, it is true that it leads to the consumption of other kind of drugs. For example many youngsters starts from smoking in a casual manner but they got addicted to it. Later this habit leads to the consumption more variety of drugs. It is further insisted that the smoking should be made illegal because, it turns a causal smoker into a drug addict. When you smoke on regular basis your body got used to it and when you didn't able to smoke again you crave for it. It can also leads to the consumption of more drugs and people loose their senses and they often commit crimes. For example, recent studies have shown that the criminals which got arrested have mostly the common habit of smoking and taking drugs.

In conclusion, smoking is really unhealthy and it should be banned. I believe that aforementioned points are strongly supporting my viewpoint.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: you strongly agree that smoking should be illegal, and the conclusion restates this view. You give relevant reasons, including health damage and the possibility of dependence, and support them with examples such as lung cancer and young people beginning to smoke. However, the response develops the health argument more clearly than the claim that smoking leads to other drug use and crime. The assertion that arrested criminals commonly smoke or take drugs is broad and unsupported, and the link between smoking and becoming a drug addict needs more careful explanation. To strengthen the response, develop fewer claims in greater depth and explain why prohibition, rather than regulation or education, is the appropriate solution.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the main ideas generally follow a sensible order. Examples and linking expressions such as “For example” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the argument. However, some transitions are mechanical or confusing: “Explaning some of the another supporting points against smoking” does not clearly introduce an argument for your position, and “It is further insisted” is an awkward reference to the preceding point. The second body paragraph also moves quickly from smoking to other drugs and then crime, so the relationships between these ideas are not always clear. Use more precise transitions and organise each paragraph around one clearly explained reason.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main points, including “health problems,” “toxins,” “addicted,” and “respiratory tract cancer.” There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “permanently cause damage” and “supporting my viewpoint.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision: “In this modernity,” “short breath,” “a causal smoker,” and “consumption of other kind of drugs” do not express the intended ideas naturally. Spelling errors such as “Cronic,” “Explaning,” and “loose” also reduce control. Build accuracy by learning common collocations for health and addiction, and check spelling and word forms during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “because,” “when,” and “that,” and the overall meaning is usually understandable. However, errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction occur across the response. For example, “the chances … has increased” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “many youngsters starts” and “they got addicted” use incorrect verb forms. In “when you didn’t able to smoke again,” the verb pattern is incomplete, and “It can also leads” combines incompatible verb forms. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas harder to follow. Practise checking each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb, while continuing to use complex structures.

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