Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Smoking is a very crucial and a very important issue in todays society .smoking not only have adverse effects on the person consuming it also effects the surrounding as well as the people near those person who are doing smoking .

Overall, smoking now a days and also in the past is very commonly done by men ,also women and now teenagers and children under 18 are commonly consuming it. In my option smoking should not be never be legal as it only have bad effects on health and sevearly damage lungs, respiratory tract and most common cause of lung and throat cancer.

Government and health related agency should try to make its use banned and plus monitor and have strict policy for person manufacturing , distributing ,adverting and displaying ..Now there are different types of smoking devices avalible like vapes , cigars, ciggirates, disposible vapes, which is very frequently use and shows more serious and life threating effects which are irreversible and cause death .

We should try to do different workshops and should give more knowledge to the people and try to make them belive the ultimate relality regarding smoking related issues and health related issues . we should an courage everybody who wants to quit .there are so much alternative nicotine products are avaibal in pharmacy and markets which help chain smokers to fulfill there demand of nicotine and help them to stop it in the end .

In the end everybody should play there role to stop the use of smoking and by this we can make our society and world more happy and reletivly a better place to live .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear: you argue that smoking should not be legal, and you address health effects, government action, public education and support for quitting. These are relevant reasons, and the reference to second-hand effects broadens the discussion beyond smokers themselves. This meets the task well overall, but some points are asserted rather than explained. For example, you say newer devices have “more serious and life threating effects” without explaining or supporting that comparison, and the suggestion that nicotine products can help smokers stop needs clarification. To strengthen the response further, develop two or three main arguments with specific explanations or examples, and address why making smoking illegal would be preferable to regulation or other measures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has an overall progression from the problem and your position to possible government and community responses, followed by a concluding appeal. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages, and phrases such as “Overall” and “In the end” signal the structure. However, connections between ideas are sometimes mechanical or unclear. The paragraph listing vapes, cigars and cigarettes moves quickly from product types to claims about their effects, while the paragraph on workshops shifts to nicotine alternatives without showing how the ideas relate. Some sentences also contain several points joined together, making the progression harder to follow. Use clearer topic sentences and develop one central point per paragraph, with linking phrases that show cause, contrast or result.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “adverse effects,” “respiratory tract,” “lung and throat cancer,” and “manufacturing” and “distributing.” This gives you a useful foundation for discussing public health and policy. However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural combinations are noticeable and sometimes make the intended meaning less clear, as in “sevearly damage,” “ultimate relality,” and “chain smokers to fulfill there demand.” Some wording is also repetitive, particularly repeated references to “health related issues” and “smoking.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “second-hand smoke,” “tobacco products,” and “cessation support” would help express your ideas clearly and appropriately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, control of sentence structure and basic grammar is inconsistent. For example, “smoking not only have adverse effects” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “people near those person who are doing smoking” shows problems with number and clause construction. The sentence beginning “Government and health related agency should try” also contains agreement and article issues, and several sentences run together or use punctuation unclearly. These errors sometimes make the reader work to understand the relationships between ideas. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles and plural forms, and divide long sentences into shorter, complete units before attempting more complex structures.

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